The Thick Black Line

[mister_troper]

Title: The Thick Black Line
Genre: Fiction (time travel, discussion of animal violence)
Word Count: 1622
Notes: Part 1 of 2. Discussion here. I'm waiving edits because it's too long and the editors are way overbooked this week, so pointers and thoughts are very welcome.

Comments

[cedarwolfsinger]

Interesting story. The part with the multiple Henry's was a bit complicated but quite amusing in terms of naming conventions. Good job -- I look forward to part two.

[mister_troper]

Thanks. And don't worry: Henry agrees with you on it being a mite bit complicated.

[rephen]

The dialog was fun and very fast-paced. It reminds me a little of that book. No matter, I didn't actually finish reading it. I like the interactions between the characters very much. Looking forward to the next part!

[mister_troper]

Yeah, that book with those things! I love that guy! I actually saw him there, and got a question to ask him about stuff. He said yes. What a guy.[/sly grin]

Thanks!

[rephen]

LOL I meant the Time Traveller's Wife

But I liked yours more. I couldn't finish that book. It lost me at chapter 5 or so. Yours has more ... snappiness in it.

[mister_troper]

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.

Never actually read the Time Traveler's Wife, though I heard about it, what with the movie and all. It was clearly a point of reference, even within the story. I think that my inspiration was an all-too-dismal look at what starting over has actually meant for me a number of times, but it very quickly went scampering off in its own direction.

[fawatson]

I like the idea of several timeframes and the way the different selves all contradict one another.

[mister_troper]

Glad you liked the idea, and just you wait, as this is about to become a bone of considerable contention within the story itself.