finally, the gratuitous conclusion.

[missdeviant]

Title: From Here to Eternity (part 4 of 4)
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Wherein the smut is brought.
Disclaimer: They’re still not mine. Bloody shame.

Comments

yum

[anonymous]

you need a cigarette? i need a cigarette! serves me right for reading this in the computer lab at school. woo. a conclusion worthy of the wait. thank you!

Re: yum

[missdeviant]

*passes the pack of Parliament Lights*

Stupid me! There's no smoking in computer labs! I'm glad you liked.

[missdeviant]

and i love your loving. thanks!

[rage_blackouts]

"...Ryan and silence were like Lizzie Borden and her axe." -- Love that.

"Not to salt your game, but your logic isn’t always gold." -- How Ryan-like to put it so bluntly!

"Whatever you want, dude. Just shut up and fucking kiss me already." Yes! Please!

Happy endings all around! I love happy endings, especially when they have sex in them! =)

I would suggest that Ryan went from slow to fast in a very short period of time. A look or a moan or a word or something would help the transition.

This whole series was great. Well-written, angsty, sexy, funny. All good things. You rock. It's a pleasure to read your stuff!

The only suggestion overall is that here's a lot of pop culture references, maybe a smidge too many. I would take out just a few so that it doesn't interrupt the story.

Other than that, this story is gold, baby.

[missdeviant]

I would suggest that Ryan went from slow to fast in a very short period of time. A look or a moan or a word or something would help the transition.

Yeah, I sort of noticed that *after* I had posted, but I was too sleepy to do anything else about it. I'm a bum that way. I think I may have just been antsy to get to the sex. (aren't we all?)

there's a lot of pop culture references, maybe a smidge too many.

That and cliches are my downfall. Especially when I *replace* the cliches with the pop-culture on edit. AKoT, being my first! fic! ever! was pretty much based on movie culture, and as the FHtE series itself drew from that, it sorta ended up that way overall.

I'm thinking of revising and posting on ff.net, but I kind of like the limited audience of LJ. After all, I've only been a part of the fanfic writing game for about a month, and I'm still getting a hang of things.

Again with the you *rock* for the comments. And for liking Marissa's shirt. :)

[jetblackberries]

SCORE. Holy crap.
That was awesome. About time they got to it! *hugs story*

[missdeviant]

*hugs back*

Aww, thanks so much for that.

[lugonn]

And while I agree that the transition from slow to fast was a bit sketchy, I liked Ryan's short: “Changed my mind.” Ryan doesn't feel the need to explain himself!

[missdeviant]

most boys never do, do they?

at least in this case, it worked out for the better. *g*