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Fic: Delusion (Mentalist Mini Bang 2011)

Jan 10, 2012 23:03

Delusion
Author: miss_peg
Artist: lilsmiles86
Link to art: (coming soon)
Word Count: 4114
Rating: PG-13
Summary: When the stress of the job gets to Lisbon she finds herself wondering if reality is quite as it seems and in the meantime manages to save a life.
Disclaimer: The Mentalist doesn't belong to me, neither does the basis for this story...you'll understand soon.
Notes: ( Read more... )

teresa lisbon, the mentalist, patrick jane, mini bang, fanfiction

Comments 14

sirenofodysseus January 11 2012, 00:04:26 UTC

THIS PIECE MAKES ME WANT TO CRY SO HARD. I just want to hug Van Pelt, and tell her that everything will be okay. I just want things to be okay for her. Will things be okay for her?

*cries*

I seriously enjoyed this story! It had be hooked from the beginning, and you are so gifted with words. Ugh. I just still want to hug Van Pelt, and tell her she can make it through. *sobs again* Thank you for sharing such a brilliant piece!

miss_peg January 21 2012, 00:53:15 UTC

Hehe, thanks! Things will be okay for her. I hope.

I do love writing, when writing cooperates.

steelesimz January 11 2012, 00:06:45 UTC

Very nice story. I love everything that you wrote.

miss_peg January 21 2012, 00:52:44 UTC

Thank you, I appreciate it!

vanrigsby January 11 2012, 02:35:51 UTC

That was... incredible. Truly incredible. You are so talented in writing. Nearly bawling at my computer screen here. Really great, made me wanna just jump in and stop Van Pelt. But, alas, I am simply a reader.

Awesomely great, had me from the start. Thank you for writing it.

Gosh. I feel I can't say enough. I'll stop now. You did good.

miss_peg January 21 2012, 00:52:33 UTC

Haha, aww! I would apologise but for me if I cry/nearly cry then that is what means I've read something great, so I shall be happy with that response.

Thanks! :D

vanrigsby January 22 2012, 03:48:30 UTC

Yeah, it definitely means I read something great! You have a gift :)

anonymous January 11 2012, 09:52:24 UTC

You're a very powerful writer madam, really good x

tromana January 11 2012, 20:32:07 UTC

You know just how great I think your writing is, really, I do. This piece is wonderful (albeit a little rushed at times, as I've said before. You could easily have let it breathe (and antagonised Lisbon some more) and let it become a Big Bang instead.)when considered alone.

My main concern (I think that's the right word) is possibly how much of a crutch Van Pelt is becoming in some of your fics. Your holiday fics have been fine, but I suspect that's because they're shorter and less... plotty. However, when comparing your two Mini Bangs, it's easy to see she becomes the driving force.

I'm also aware that this may be me being hypocritical, but it's just something to be aware of perhaps?

Now I feel horrible. :-(

miss_peg January 11 2012, 20:36:18 UTC

It wasn't my intention, really, but somehow it happened. :P I guess because I'm not fully comfortable with writing Jane and Lisbon, or I was less comfortable when I wrote these, that was a way I could get into them without having to fully commit? That's the only way I can think of how that happened, lol.

tromana January 11 2012, 20:37:50 UTC

Yeah, it is possible that the fic's showing it's age (already!). 'I'm a little home...' certainly doesn't have the same problem!

miss_peg January 11 2012, 20:50:49 UTC

Ooh, yeah, I forgot about that one!

Strangely enough I now feel a little less comfortable writing Van Pelt...hahaha.