And Then She Was Gone (WiP)

[miss1nformation]

Author: miss1nformation
Title: And Then She Was Gone*
Characters: Jo Calderone/Lady Gaga
Rating: MA
Summary: "My name is Jo Calderone, and I was an asshole."
Word Count: N/A
Author's Notes: WiP - Written in third person, past and present, Jo's perspective; theme will be mostly dark, cynical, and angry. Key points of reference/interest: piano, bender, retaliation

Comments

[meagan4dominic]

[needs more]
Perfect starting point. The opening paragraph gives enough information to catch my interest without giving away too much that I feel like I know what's going to happen next, y'know? And then it switches to the wonderful setting of them in bed, I love all the detail about Gaga, especially about her wigs never moving. And the crack about the heels at the end, never stops being funny!!!!

Bring on the piano scene!

[miss1nformation]

Thank's for reading what little bit I have! XD And I'm glad you like it! Can't wait to work on it some more. And I'm excited for the piano too. hehe

[meagan4dominic]

A little bit of Gaga/Jo is better than none at all!

LOLZ, you're going to be at piano lessons thinking about them on a piano!! XD

[miss1nformation]

omg, i hope not! my piano instructor goes to my church! XD but i ain't gonna lie, during this weeks lesson i was thinking about Jo!

[iyeshana]

I didn't notice you had this posted ! thanks for messaging me about it :) I've been pretty busy so I've been just deleting most of my emails :/

Aside from what I said before, I like what you added that's new. I love how the tone is nostalgic and dramatic. It makes me wonder if Jo is thinking about this after an even bigger blow-up. Which is kind of a cliffhanger, for me. I want to know what's coming ahead, which is good ! I hope you add more of those little stories about the Jo/Gaga fights... the quick pace is pleasing to a short-attention span that a lot of fanfic readers have !

Also, I like Jo's slang. I feel like you captured what I imagine as his character well. It's strange imagining Gaga and Jo as two different people, but this fic makes me imagine them as a pair, so you're doing what you set out to accomplish.

[miss1nformation]

Thanks for the feedback sweetie! I've sent you my revisions too (it's wonderful having two sets of eyes other than my own looking over what I'm doing, cos I get paranoid that I'm missing something). And your insight into it is great inspiration!

Writing this as two separate people is a bit strange too! So I'm glad you feel that I am portraying it accurately! It means a lot! ♥

[iyeshana]

no problem ! this actually gives me something to do as relaxation. I've been stressed getting ready for school, and fanfiction was always my reprieve. It's something a bit easier to read than a thousand page fantasy novel or something ! I'll thank YOU for the relaxation time :)

I'm reading the new draft now!