I think what I like best about this chapter is the naive and childish aspect of Harry when he is drunk. Everything in his mind is reduced to simple "here and nows", and even though he struggles to ponder and think through certain things, such as his wonderful (and somewhat regretful, in retrospect) first kiss, he cannot quite wrap his mind around anything except the immediate action. I really think you portrayed that retreat into the child-state well... and it contrasts so nicely to the terribly lucid and horrible dream at the end of the chapter. I found myself wanting Harry to just let go in the beginning, to some extent, because he clearly needs a break from all of his ongoing pain, and Draco is the one who can give it to him. But later, it was as if I sobered along with Harry, and realized that there is no easy way out. Things are not so simple as they were in childhood. I still believe Draco can help heal Harry, but there is clearly a lot of work that still needs to be done, for both of them. Nicely done, my dear.
Sorry this took so long to get to; my internet crapped out on me and I had to wait for a bit to get it back.
Thank you SO much for connecting to Harry so well. Life is like this in so many ways; even when you let go, sometimes there are consequences in the coming morning. Your review was so deep and moving that I needed a day or two to come up with a proper reply; you pointed out things that, at the time, I did not realize I was putting down or what I was truly saying, until you said so. Thank you for such an introspective review. *hugs*
I feel that reviews are very important to the author, and should not simply consist of the fact that the story was well-liked or hated... If someone is going to put effort into writing good fiction (good HP fiction, might I add), then as a reviewer who liked the story, I want to tell the person exactly why I liked it: what works, what affects me particularly, etc. I really like your story, if you couldn't tell *grins*... Harry's trauma just strikes so deeply, and the fear of betrayal is very potent. There was a split second when Draco turned and ran from Harry in the dark room during which I hated Draco... but I know that Harry isn't the only one who suffered a trauma during the war... I am deeply curious as to why Draco fled. Thanks for a lovely and well-depicted tale. I look forward to more.
I know I am WAY late in reading this, but I LOVED this line:
"How many have you had?" Draco teased. Harry tensed slightly, a bright blush appearing on his face as he realized that he was only on his second beverage and he was obviously drunk. For the first time in his life.
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*goes to read more*
<3!
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Thank you SO much for connecting to Harry so well. Life is like this in so many ways; even when you let go, sometimes there are consequences in the coming morning. Your review was so deep and moving that I needed a day or two to come up with a proper reply; you pointed out things that, at the time, I did not realize I was putting down or what I was truly saying, until you said so. Thank you for such an introspective review. *hugs*
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Thanks for a lovely and well-depicted tale. I look forward to more.
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"How many have you had?" Draco teased. Harry tensed slightly, a bright blush appearing on his face as he realized that he was only on his second beverage and he was obviously drunk. For the first time in his life.
"Ten," Harry said confidently.
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He could feel his sanity shredding against the agony of it <3
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