{fic} the order of things

[mintstars]

the order of things
kame/yamada; for the rarepair meme
G, angst, of unrequited love

Comments

[atenishinai]

At this point, Yamada's lucky enough to be popular enough to actually be seen on the Shounen Club. Everytime he talks to Yamada, whether taping or not, is precious, and Yamada is happy, so happy everytime he does.
I had the most issues with this line. It's...I don't know, awkwardly phrased? Also. In the world you and I write with, both members of a pair are usually "he". This tends to generate confusion. Italics are your friend. Or you can pretend Kame is god and use He.

It's cute though XDDD Love the brackets *laugh* this definitely has nothing to do with my newfound love for brackets in fanfiction

[mintstars]

It was originally written in 2ndpov, so I can understand the confusion. ;;; I'll go through and fiddle with that asap :D

akslgkal;gka; I love brackets~ :D I stopped using them after I got out of writing angst when I was in Toho fandom, but I want to get back into writing angst and using brackets again. ;;;

[akillarian]

Me like, me like. First crush is bittersweet eh.

[mintstars]

Very much so, ne? D:

Thank you for commenting! <3

[maplarojcan]

i stumbled and fell in love. :) this is so nicely written and kame is just so nice~ :)

hahaha somehow it's like falling in love with your teacher when you're still young... *rubs chin* i never had that. :) i studied in an all girl's school. XD

[diamondsjack]

...aww! i liked this a lot, despite not really following KT or HSJ. ♥ short, but so perfectly full of bittersweet. poor wee yamada. ♥ but he'll grow!

[mintstars]

oh gosh, thank you! ♥ I'm glad you liked it, thank you for reading! :D

[randomicicle]

HELLO KAME/TINY KID.

♥