Jealous or The Ultimate Betrayal - 2/2

[minesomine]

Author: Minesomine with Ichigotabetai's contribution
Pairing: main Yunjae and Yoosu, other pairings
Rating: Rated for themes, violence and language
Warnings: Trigger for jealousy,infidelity, betrayal, verbal abuse and attempted rape
Summary: They were the perfect couple. Or were they?

Part 1/2,

Comments

[roughmetal2]

Whew! Jae is such a nice person to be dealt with this kind of betrayal, not only from one but from the two men he loves and trusts the most.. I hate yunho and chunnie for letting their desire and obsession cloud their minds. What they have is something so beautiful but they tried to destroy it. Fortunately, jae is a strong person and his natural good-heartedness will put him in a good stead despite what he has gone through.

[minesomine]

Double betrayal. Twice the pain.
Yes, Jae is strong enough to pick up and carry on.

[chihana11]

I was really glad Jae saw through everyone and was ok at the end.

Thank you for returning to writing. You did a great job of editing, I can't tell which bits are yours and which are the Ichi's.

[minesomine]

Was this as dark as I hinted? Or darker than you expected?
I hope my warnings are explicit enough. I know this is not your cup of tea. Thank you for still reading it anyway.

I pulled some bits from personal experience, friend's experience and extrapollated with a very generous dose of my imagination. And then set the tone by what Ichi had written for me. I'm pretty sure had she written the full story it would have gone even darker.
I can tell in secret what she did wrote. You really can't tell? Neither did she when I showed her what I had already done. But I rule that under temporary amnesia.

[chihana11]

Well I had seen your comments to each other about it and so I expected dark doings.
I think your warnings are fine. Maybe put one in for verbal abuse too?
Oh baby. I'm sorry to hear any of this is from your own experience.
((Huggles you))

I guess I could try to pull out the bits that sound like her, with a magnifying glass if I wanted to.
But it flows together well. I thought some of the belittling and swearing was yours, you always get that sexually jealous male voice right.

[minesomine]

Done. Warning already up

[jaebonjour]

omg this story is so dark. yet you wrote it perfectly.
damn i thought i will never get more angry after that good for nothing bastard jung fucked min behind jae"s back. but that backstabber chun prove me otherwise
omg jae T_T my poor baby jae. you're so strong, you can survive baby. find another person that will love you unconditionally. you deserve that T_T

[minesomine]

Aww, thank you. Dark indeed.

Yunho is not a bastard that gets to apologize here. Jae won't ever let him apologize.
And Yoochun is even worse. He can get us even more angry than Yunho and that is saying something.

[sheerasyj]

Wow..both of them are really sick...esp chunnie..huh...i know this is supposed to be dark and all but i kinda wish you'd write in some good stuff happening to jae and how yun n chun reacted to it..you know..karma and stuff cos they're so evil..and jae's such a sweetie...but still it's very good...

[minesomine]

Thanks to your comment I already imagined stuff for a sequel. :)

[sheerasyj]

Ooooohhh...sequel..yay!! Gimme gimme..*grabby hands*.. Thanks so much!! That would be really wonderful...will look fwd to it..but no pressure...take your time ;D

[minesomine]

No worry. One of these days a sequel is gonna show up.

[xzeffirx]

When I read the warnings I thought the story would be dark, but not the end... Like it could have all happened in previous relations or childhood or similar. No one warned me about broken YunJae! /Pouts/ And Jae's soulmate being a jerk as well - its too much for me..
Going to read something happy now.

[minesomine]

Sorry. Let me hug you.
Yeahhh, lots of dark stuff is usually written as smth that happened before.
No worry. I'm a sucker for happy endings. I have/will have other happy Yunjae stories.