Challenge Response: Nanofiction

Sep 02, 2008 23:50

The Last Time He Mocked Her Writing

She stood in the murky hallway; drops of water slapped into the bucket by the wall.

“It’s insulting and degrading,” she said, her hand on the doorknob.

“I didn’t mean it that way,” he objected half-heartedly.

“You never do,” she said and opened the door to the driving rain-a welcome taste of crystalline

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gelsey September 3 2008, 06:08:49 UTC
Fabulous. So much tension and drama in so few words!

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redvelvetcanopy September 3 2008, 14:54:02 UTC
Oooh, good for her! I love the dripping and the rain--both really make this feel sad.

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bemoan1000 September 3 2008, 15:03:47 UTC
Even though she was walking into the rain I felt her freedom.

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laudomia September 3 2008, 19:12:17 UTC
Bravo for the heroine (and for you)!

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cotidiana September 11 2008, 14:44:31 UTC
Your first line sets up the scene perfectly, in just 16 words. Wow.

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