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millstone1005

Firebug, Chapter 4/7

Jun 26, 2006 19:27

Firebug 4

Title: Firebug
Characters: Ryan, Sandy, Kirsten, Seth and other season 1 characters
Timeframe: mid season 1
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I own nothing related to The O.C.. Not for profit.
Description: There is a fire at Harbor. Arson. Guess who is the prime suspect?

Author’s Note: Much thanks to my new beta fredsmith518 for all of her ( Read more... )

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Comments 10

makeitstopjamie June 27 2006, 01:53:11 UTC

Very good! I liked how the questioning went, poor Ryan:( I've been watching too many law shows, but it's nice to be rooting for the potential suspect and to think that the dective is evil.

millstone1005 June 27 2006, 02:07:37 UTC

Thanks.

Yeah, I know. On those cop shows, they're always tricking the suspects and telling them not to get a lawyer and stuff, and it is "okay" because the suspect is guilty. Who cares about due process?

beachtree June 27 2006, 03:00:51 UTC

Your Sandy didn't disappoint. You really captured his S1 dynamic with Ryan at its best and when it held the most promise. Whatever damage was done to their relationship by the lack of trust so evident during the Oliver Twisted period isn't apparent here. Instead, this seems to be helping to heal that chasm- at least in this moment. Right now Ryan needs Sandy and appears to believe in him enough to defer to him completely in the presence of his accusers- I mean the "objective investigators." (Yeah, Freudian slip ( ... )

millstone1005 June 27 2006, 03:33:30 UTC

Thanks for your comments.

Your Sandy didn't disappoint.

I'm glad.

60schic June 27 2006, 04:11:19 UTC

Yay Sandy. Way to be a parent and a guardian! And no HotheadRyan. Good for him. So something bad will happen next, right *she asks holding her breath*?

millstone1005 June 27 2006, 15:06:19 UTC

Thanks.

So something bad will happen next, right

Well, you'll just have to keep reading and see, right? :-)

knightdawn June 27 2006, 08:00:47 UTC

Sandy in an almost action sequence AWESOME!!!! You should really get Sandy up in court to do his thing, that would be even more AWESOME!!!!
I'm soooo jealous of you, you update so quickly, you must really have a clear vision of where your going. I start a fic without any idea of which road I'm taking. I'm trying to IMPROVE on that!!!!

millstone1005 June 27 2006, 15:08:06 UTC

In my opinion, it is a MUST for a writer to have a story mapped out in their head before they even start writing it. I always know where a story is going and how it ends before I start writing chapter 1. Of course, things almost always change as I write it and get reviews with questions and suggestions, but I always have an idea where I'm going.

katwoman76 June 27 2006, 10:49:22 UTC

I was a little bit occupied the last time so I had no time yet to comment, but I wanted to say that I really like this story.

Poor Ryan. His history and background always follows him around and makes things more difficult for him.
Which is why I totally understand why he sometimes behaves like GrandmaRyan. I know a lot of people don't get it since he is a teenager and it would be normal to act out and make stupid mistakes, but he has a lot to lose and with probation and all that little mistakes already can bring him back in deep shiot. And even without doing stuff wrong he gets in trouble already because of the prejudices and false accusations of others.

millstone1005 June 27 2006, 15:13:09 UTC

Thanks.

That is so true. He knows he can't afford to act out. And trouble always does seem to find him, whether he does or not.