Nice. Though... the extra ", and." on two sentences kinda jarred me from the fic. And in some instances in the passage where you had some of those unfinished thoughts/words/narrations, perhaps you could have used ellipses for that? Just a thought.
Off topic but unless there are some people actually assumed the fanwriters are the original writer and owner of the series, it should be okay to not include the disclaimers there. Cos I saw this and almost thought.... wait, does the disclaimer means this fic was not written by you?
Regarding the disclaimer, I know it's not exactly necessary to put one when we all know it's a fic anyway, but. Um. It's just that I've been told off once for not putting up a disclaimer in the header of my old fic before, so I guess I was just trying to be on the safe side? xPPP
LOL I should've also probably written it properly with the whole 'the characters belong to TOEI, this is written purely for fun and there's no profit made...' only I got lazy and just shortened it to 'not mine' xDDD
...I just realize it could actually lead to a misunderstanding *__* I'll fix the header asap >__<
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I really miss the both of them. Awesome job btw~! ^^
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Off topic but unless there are some people actually assumed the fanwriters are the original writer and owner of the series, it should be okay to not include the disclaimers there. Cos I saw this and almost thought.... wait, does the disclaimer means this fic was not written by you?
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LOL I should've also probably written it properly with the whole 'the characters belong to TOEI, this is written purely for fun and there's no profit made...' only I got lazy and just shortened it to 'not mine' xDDD
...I just realize it could actually lead to a misunderstanding *__*
I'll fix the header asap >__<
Anyway, thank you for reading and commenting!^^
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Hee :D
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