That Mafia!AU Pikame Fic Part Three (continued)

[mi_key]

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[chatacat]

..I'm pretty much incoherent right now...
The twist that Kame still had his memories...and the ending just absolutely killed me ;_; I think your description of how Ryo if he loves something he will love it intensely is spot on... So Jin was the only one left alive hey? I love your writing style.. kept me on edge with the flashbacks, flashforwards and inner monologues... thank you for this verse!

[chatacat]

I forgot to say.. I love the part where Uchi, Ryo and Kame were bickering amongst each other and Kame just pulling out all those weapons.. that was very LOL XD

[mi_key]

So Jin was the only one left alive hey?

Yes, because he's unlucky like that xP

I was kinda worried for the narrative style in this one, since going backwards-forwards like this is going to be rather confusing, so I'm glad it works for you^^ *hugs*

Thank you for reading and commenting! :)))

[chatacat]

Hehe.. no I love this kind of writing style, cus it makes you try and piece out what's happening and then you realise and its like OH SHI-!
Hands down this has been my favourite fic I've read this year =D I'm gonna go read your other stuff now!! *squeals*

There were some questions I'm wondering about though... maybe they were answered in the previous chapters but;
So Kame left because he wanted to look for Yamapi because he took a liking to him the first time they met in the lab right? They didnt have any relationship back then yeah?
And...because Kame left... his organisation sent someone to terminate him and he got found by the police?? Was yamapi working at a scientist at the eraser organisation? and then joined toma?? hhehe.

[mi_key]

Two exit wounds on Kame’s chest.

Which means, he got shot from behind, which means... yes, it was Ryo^^ And yes, it was out of reflex, since Ryo didn't know someone else was there >_<

Hope that helps^^
Thank you for reading and commenting! :))

[javvie]

It makes sense now. Well most of it make sense now. And it was very very sad.

[mi_key]

Sorry to make you sad >_< *hugs*

I was kinda experimenting with the style, so I'm glad it mostly works for you xP

Thank you for reading and commenting! :D

[snow_meow]

Seems like the only one who survives all this mess is Jin.

Kame in his twisted way really cares for Pi.

[mi_key]

Seems like the only one who survives all this mess is Jin.

Jin is...unlucky like that. xP Being left behind is painful Jinnnnnnn

Thank you for reading and commenting! :))

[absinthe1213]

wow!
everyone died~~~

[mi_key]

Except not really :P

I mean, in the second part, Jin's alive. He's unlucky like that^^

Thank you for reading! :D