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FIC: Inevitable 44: Blood Debt

Jan 12, 2006 18:20

Inevitable Forty-Four: Blood Debt
by Mhalachai
Note: A total of 9,706 words. What do you think of that, huh? Enjoy! (And yes, this is the Christoff chapter)

( Forty-Four: Blood Debt )

story: inevitable

Comments 65

sabriel_0405 January 13 2006, 03:05:31 UTC

You know, I was planning on going to bed. But of course now I won't be late for work.

My favorite line: Just because he could, Harry ran his eyes over her one more time. Second favorite: "I swear to God, Harry, if you ask me if those pants make your butt look big, I will shift and eat you."

The scene at Christoff's was interesting but I can't imagine it ends there. I also can't imagine Harry going back to school in the morning. I'm not ready yet!

Great job.

mhalachaiswords January 13 2006, 04:37:57 UTC

I to try and time these things for late at night for some people :)

I know what you mean about not being ready. I've been writing this thing for almost a year, and I'm still not ready for the month of August to be over!

But soon it will be. *sigh*

catherinecookmn January 13 2006, 05:35:24 UTC

August! Indeed.

thymidinekinase January 13 2006, 03:23:19 UTC

Yummy extra-long chapter. Thanks! It felt more like a Harry Potter novel than usual, probably because it stayed in 3rd person the whole time. The jumping from scene to scene also felt a lot like reading an HP book. Were you consciously making the first set-in-England chapter more HP-ish? If you were, it worked, I think.

I was sure that the dinner was going to go badly -- these things always do for Anita. I imagine it was a nice surprise for her. I'm not sure it fits AB canon, though. Heh. The anti-climax of it being all part of some other ploy entirely was pretty funny.

[nitpick]Luckily, there were no ties. Harry had never worn one, but he was sure it would strangle him.
No? I can't recall any ties in the novels being mentioned, but there were house ties in the films. [/nitpick]

mhalachaiswords January 13 2006, 05:31:43 UTC

The Harry-pov wasn't intentional, per say, but this chapter just felt like it needed Harry's reactions. We've see Anita's reactions in dealing with vampire politics, and I didn't want to rehash that. We may see how she deals with Diagon Alley, however.

I'm going off the books in this story, and since only the robes are mentioned, I'm leaving the whole tie issue to the side for now.

iamabee_buzz January 13 2006, 03:38:26 UTC

AHHHHHHH SO GOOD!

I have nothing else to say.

mhalachaiswords January 13 2006, 05:22:47 UTC

*g* glad to make you gleeful.

mischiefcat January 13 2006, 04:01:01 UTC

Awesome chapter. Thanks for the update.

mhalachaiswords January 13 2006, 05:23:42 UTC

You're quite welcome :)

cissasghost January 13 2006, 04:05:10 UTC

It made Harry feel about five years older.

'Cause, y'know, at 22 he'd be mature and world-wise and jaded. Snerk.

Loved the Parseltongue thing - very cool. Wondering what's up with Moroven and Cristoff. *insert oft-repeated 'OMGsoCOOL!' review here*

-Sonya

mhalachaiswords January 13 2006, 05:25:34 UTC

When you're 17, 22 seems really grown up. Then you get to 22 and go, damn.

Moroven and Christoff? A vampire power struggle taking place with Hogwarts in the geographical centre? I have no idea *wanders off, whistling happily*