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This Is A Low (Final Chapter)

Aug 12, 2011 23:35

Title: This Is A Low (Part VII)
Pairings: Ocelot/Big Boss (some Ocelot/Eva and Big Boss/Eva)
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 4758
Warnings: Some het in earlier chapters.
Summary: It is 1971, and Big Boss has tracked Eva to Hanoi. Enter Ocelot, who is charged with the responsibility of finding her, breaking her out, and bringing her to Big Boss.
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fanfic, "this is a low", multichapter, 2011, nsfw (some sexual content), big boss/ocelot

Comments 6

oudeteron August 13 2011, 00:00:14 UTC

I apologize for the lack of a coherent comment, but--

This was epic. I'd been wondering how you were going to wrap up, but the way it was done in the end beat anything I would've expected - Ocelot getting shot, for instance no thanks to BB's fine ass, and that he managed to fire in that crucial moment after all he'd been through was badass beyond belief. (You've done a great job describing his health state, by the way; I've never passed out from anything worse than plain exhaustion, but I could almost feel the constant threat of a blackout looming over him reading this). BB and Eva were quite engaging too - the epitome of professionalism indeed - and I liked that you managed to convey the varying degrees of familiarity between them so effectively. The Zero cameo was most welcome, too. XD

And hooray for the ending! Wasn't expecting it from how this chapter was going, which made it all the better in the end.

...I meant to quote some stuff but it's 2AM so let's just say I liked a lot. Congrats on finishing!

missmonkeh August 13 2011, 14:05:35 UTC

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for sticking with it! I tallied it up and this fic is over 20k long in total, so that's a lot of perseverence on your part XD

I HAD TO HAVE A ZERO CAMEO. I couldn't shake the image of him as the welcoming committee, like the Prime Minister or something. And I'm glad you liked the ending, I was trying really hard to avoid 'cheesy'.

almost_eatable August 13 2011, 06:37:29 UTC

this has to be the best metal gear fic I've ever read.

missmonkeh August 13 2011, 14:07:01 UTC

that's so kind of you ^___^ thank you for reading!

trolljima August 16 2011, 13:44:46 UTC

HOW DO I ALWAYS MANAGE TO MISS WHEN YOU POST CHAPTERS OF THIS

I can't remember if I actually commented on any of the other chapters... I remember /intending/ to at least, ever since I read the first one X/

But anyway, you made me both squirm with glee and cry with this last chapter ;A; idk what it is about Ocelot and his hopeless devotion to Big Boss but it just brings out the waterworks in me when it's done well, and this was done wonderfully.

I can't pick out certain bits I like most because I'd just end up quoting the whole fic X/ Your characterisation is perfect though, especially stubborn Adamska, refusing to see things staring him in the face, and being insanely badass despite bloodloss. I /know/ how hard it is to even think straight, let alone walk or aim a gun after losing that much blood, and the way you wrote it was really striking.

The bit at the end with EVA and Zero was frighteningly ominous though D= I KNOW WHAT YOU ARE PLANNING, ZERO =V

tl;dr THAT WAS AWESOME, YOU'RE AWESOME ALJSDHFALS

missmonkeh August 16 2011, 20:24:17 UTC

I'M GLAD I COULD INDUCE GLEE. Not so much the crying XD

Eee I'm so glad you enjoyed it, I had worried so much about characterisation, particularly doing justice to Ocelot, since I'd never written MGS prior to this. So I'm really happy you think I did a good job.

YAY YOU GOT THAT BIT. Zero and his nefarious scheme! It happened so soon after she joined that I assumed he must have started on it almost immediately.

THANK YOU FOR READING ALL THIS WAFFLE, AND FOR THE LOVELY COMMENTS <3