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FIC: A Break In Character, part 4

Jul 13, 2011 03:40

The final chapter. Thank you for reading, and have a fine day.

Title: A Break In Character (part 4 of 4)
Pairing: Big Boss/Ocelot, Liquid/Ocelot, Mantis/Ocelot's Mind
Rating: MA15+ to R
Word Count: 9477 (my longest fic yet), but cut into four pieces to avoid eyestrain and TL;DR.
Summary: Mantis finds a crack in the old man's armor.
Notes/Warnings For ( Read more... )

nsfw (explicit sex), liquid/ocelot, mgs1, nsfw (dark themes), mantis/ocelot, big boss/ocelot

Comments 9

anonymous July 31 2011, 00:44:40 UTC

Sorry, don't have an LJ account but just wanted to say I loved this. I think you did an amazing job keeping them both in character and Ocelot's dream/memory was just the right mix of adorable and depressing. Great job!

daemonikk August 7 2011, 16:50:05 UTC

Cheers! I'm really pleased you like it, hope you get this reply oh magical anon.

anonymous October 8 2011, 04:22:51 UTC

How does this not have more comments?!? IT'S AMAZING! I adore the imagery and raw emotion; you're a wonderful writer!

daemonikk January 25 2012, 02:04:46 UTC

Thank you! Oh my, I'm blushing now.

thepinkkirby January 25 2012, 01:45:26 UTC

I think this is one of my favourite stories I've yet to see! I wonder, will you write more about Big Boss/ Ocelot? They are my favourite pairing and,- seeing this- I'm certain that I will enjoy anything you write about them. (As long as you don't go out of character, or make it unusually kinky, or make it not emotional and/or romantic.... I'm sort of picky that way.)

Either ways, I stand by my comment saying that this was quite fantastic! A very intelligent-sounding, well-written fanfiction, if I do say so myself.

daemonikk January 25 2012, 02:04:11 UTC

Oh goodness, you're so kind! Thank you very much for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.
I actually have quite a few Big Boss/Ocelot stories in various states of completion, it's the finishing that gets tricky (I keep getting distracted with new plot bunnies). But yes, there will be more stories! :)

thepinkkirby February 18 2012, 01:40:16 UTC

I hope so! I exspect good things from you.

I have one question, and a slight critcism I didn't think of after reading this the first time.

I am having trouble imagining the area in which this is all taking place. I don't believe I've ever come across a glassed-in balcony, and what I imagined would be difficult for Mantis to maneuver on. I suppose my question would be to ask what you mean "exactly".

The slight critcism is that for some reason, I sort of wished you dwelled on Mantis recognizing Big Boss more, or mentioned it later. I don't know exactly how you could've worked it in to the story, but I enjoy the concept.

Anyways, again, I really enjoyed this, and I look forward to reading anything else from you!

daemonikk August 22 2013, 15:35:54 UTC

Oh man, I'm so sorry for not replying O_O;; I'm not on LJ very much anymore. Good thing I was feeling nostalgic, huh?

Question: I'm not sure if such a place was actually in Shadow Moses, in retrospect, but I think I just made up the balcony. It also seemed to me to be foolish to have an open balcony in Alaska. So I guess in practice it's more like a sunroom? Like a viewing platform rather than an actual balcony. I hope that makes sense!

Criticism: Yeah, even I admit I totally dropped the ball on that one. I think I had some idea for a semi-sequel with Mantis going through what he knows now about Ocelot and Big Boss and what that means for the mission, but I don't think I ever ended up writing it. Maybe I will, now that you've reminded me! I'd sure like to revisit this, I have similar reservations to you about the way Mantis ended up reacting.

Thanks again, and sorry again for the ridiculous delay in replying!

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