This Is A Low

[missmonkeh]

This is my first ever attempt at writing fic for the MGS fandom. Sadly I do not yet have a beta (seriously, I have no MGS-loving friends. Sad times) so this is might be a little rough around the edges. Nonetheless, I hope you enjoy it. Concrit is welcome :)

Note: This is Chapter One of a WIP

Title: This Is A Low
Pairings: Ocelot/Big Boss (some Ocelot/

Comments

[slythgeek]

I read this on fanfiction.net, and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I'm now telling all of my MGSlasher friends about it. <3

[slythgeek]

Do you need me to beta? I'm a tad bit of a busy person, but for good MGS fic, I would be quite happy to do it. I can tell you right now a few small things that need fixed. "Towards" is unnecessary when you can use "toward". There are a few places missing punctuation. Story-wise, it's wonderful except for some places where "he" is ambiguous. The interaction, though... that's perfect.

[oudeteron]

/butts in, but in peace

My impression has always been that "towards" vs. "toward" is a matter of usage in British vs. American English.

[slythgeek]

Ahhhh... that explains it. I guess that also explains some of the other odd spellings. :) Author may be British.

[missmonkeh]

I am as British as afternoon tea! I have an American beta for another fandom I write in who is occasionally perplexed by my Britishisms :)

[oudeteron]

I liked this! The suspense in this part was great, especially with the use of flashbacks. And your characterization of Ocelot is ~pretty good.

MOD NOTE: tag with "2011" and "multichapter" as well, please?

[missmonkeh]

Hooray, glad you enjoyed it. I'm always worried about doing Ocelot's character justice :)

(Tags amended!)

[oudeteron]

He's sort of intimidating at first, but fun. :D

(Thanks; it'll make the fic easier to find. Actually, following the comm's practices I should give this its own story tag too, so here goes. MORE TAGS MORE FUN)

[bigboobsmcgoo]

"He wasn't used to being referred to as 'adorable', primarily because he was not, and never had been."

...Suuuuuuure thing, Ocelot. You just keep telling yourself that. I'm glad I finally got around to reading this, I've been meaning to for ages and so far, I am not the least bit disappointed. Oh, how the world needs more Ocelot!

[missmonkeh]

Oh, thanks for reading! I'm very glad you're enjoying it so far.

(Brilliant username :D)

[athenemiranda]

I'd like to apologise for not reading this sooner; can't believe it's your first fic. You set scenes so well, and I love how this scene is so calm and yet so tense. The Ocelot narration is delicious, too. <3 Will read more asap.