Wow, the story's really uplifting. It's so sweet, and Hinata being brought into the mix, nice addition. I couldn't take Hinata getting hurt, etc. And lol at Naruto and Kiba having used all of the whipped cream in one night XD. Makes me wonder what they were using it for. *Giggles* Awesome so far, and I'm afraid I can't think of any titles. Oh well.
Hinata is one of my favorite characters, and I just couldn't hurt her by not letting her end up with her true love(s). These first two parts have to be uplifting, because the other two chapters are going to be filled with violence, death and sadness (I think).
MGGRUBB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I know I promised to read this and Timeline a week ago, AND I DID. But I couldn't write a decent review until now, I'm so sorry! ):
It was so UNFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFALKDHSKLDGJUINRJHGDNJV. They have thresomes now. O-o And YAY. I LOVE HINATA. I like how the story is progressing, the pacing and well, all the other technicalities are good, so yeah. They're all in character.
I can't think of a title though. I'm so bad at it, it's embarrassing.
How does The Future sound for the overall series title? I think this chapter will be called Peace, the second chapter War, and I'm not sure about the final chapter.
You might cry cause of something really fluffy at the end, but I assure you I have no intention of killing off any of the important characters. I got that out of my system when I wrote both versions of "How". I might eventually write something to kill off characters, but it won't be part of the series over all.....i think.
Late reply, but I love this! I had to resist the urge to scroll down here and comment before I finished reading it! The changes you made really make the story nice, I mean, I feel bad that Kakashi and Shizune aren't there anymore, but at the same time it seems like that's what would really happen! 10/10, loved it!
As for a title, well...I'm bad with titles : / I think "The future" is a pretty good title considering it is the future and all though, I don't think anyone else is using the title.
I gotta say, I'm eager for the next part, I absolutely loved this one!
I'm glad you liked it. I've started on the next part, and I'm just proof reading night four part 2 before I post it, and I've already written a page of day four. It really set me back losing everything like that. It was just lousy timing over all. I'd erased all the files on the flash drive I was using as a back up and lent it to a friend two days before my hard drive crashed. Now I have two back ups to keep that from hapopening again. Can't wait to read you're new series.
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Awesome so far, and I'm afraid I can't think of any titles. Oh well.
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I know I promised to read this and Timeline a week ago, AND I DID. But I couldn't write a decent review until now, I'm so sorry! ):
It was so UNFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFALKDHSKLDGJUINRJHGDNJV. They have thresomes now. O-o
And YAY. I LOVE HINATA.
I like how the story is progressing, the pacing and well, all the other technicalities are good, so yeah. They're all in character.
I can't think of a title though. I'm so bad at it, it's embarrassing.
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As for a title, well...I'm bad with titles : / I think "The future" is a pretty good title considering it is the future and all though, I don't think anyone else is using the title.
I gotta say, I'm eager for the next part, I absolutely loved this one!
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