LJIdol Week 19 - Entry

[mezzominty]

Kindling"You're OK. You're OK." He said to himself quietly. The pack was heavy, and the voices were getting louder. He had spent the previous weekend roaming Central Park, searching for the driest twigs he could find. Well actually, the voices were telling him which twigs were the "special" ones. He then passed a relatively quiet work week at his

Comments

[fodschwazzle]

I love the density of these images. A doomed seer in a modern age. Is it a triumph for him that his fires were extinguished in exchange for flooding, or just an odd evolution of his prediction?

I would offer the criticism that, in its usage here, "lightening" means to make something weigh less. Without the "e" gives you the result you want.

Quite thought provoking piece.

[mezzominty]

Ahh, good catch! Thank you so much!

[labelleizzy]

wow. remarkably evocative! What a very cool approach to this prompt!

[mezzominty]

Thank you!

[theun4givables]

But why was he trying to set all of the little bundles on fire with lightning? Why was he doing any of it? What purpose did it have??

[mezzominty]

We'll have to ask the voices in his head ;) Thanks for reading!

[adoptedwriter]

Is this a part of a bigger story which explains his motivations? AW

[mezzominty]

Nope. Just a weird bit of flash fiction with a weird main character who hears voices. Thanks for reading!

[roina_arwen]

"Flash" fiction indeed! :)

[mezzominty]

Lol I didn't even catch that

[jexia]

I enjoyed this, thanks!

[mezzominty]

Thank you!