Very nice, as a whole. You captured the emptiness in Mitsuko's life after Hikaru leaves, and her realisation that he's been growing away from her before she even knew.
Hikaru's so used to having a terrible secret he has to hide. He can't realise that to normal people, being interested is a way of showing they care. And how else is Mitsuko supposed to show she cares? She can't even speak his language.
I know, God. One of the most facepalm moments in the whole story is when Yashiro is having that "you're lucky your parents don't hate you" talk with him, and Hikaru is just, "Oh...you mean other people's parents don't just silently back them up no matter how mysterious and crazy they're being? Wow."
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I love that line!
Very nice, as a whole. You captured the emptiness in Mitsuko's life after Hikaru leaves, and her realisation that he's been growing away from her before she even knew.
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Poor Waya, he suffers many trials. I like to think that Isumi is in the background for that phonecall, laughing until he can't breathe.
I'm glad you liked it!
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I like how you opened and closed the story.
Thank you for sharing.
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Sigh.
I'm glad you liked it!
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Thank you for the comment!
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:(
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Hikaruuuuuu!
gah.
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