Jumpers, by Devonwood

[devonwood]

Title: Jumpers
Prompts: A Molly Weasley Knit Jumper, The Attic at the Burrow, A Day Of New Beginnings, Romantic Comedy
Characters: Nymphadora Tonks, Remus Lupin
Pairing: Tonks/Lupin
Word Count: 3,835
Rating: M for Sexual Content
Disclaimer: Uh...Potterverse doesn't belong to me. Don't sue.
Summary: "It's the quiet ones you have to watch out for...they

Comments

[kerrymdb]

Oh my! This was great. I really liked how you used the prompts. I certainly hope that Sirius was nice enough to put a silencing charm on the attic so that the...erm, activities didn't cause anyone to blush downstairs.

I loved how you described Tonks in the begining, especially the “Sod the Dress Code!” line.

I made the mistake of reading this right before I go to bed. Now I'll be having naughty dreams about werewolves playing strip poker...

[devonwood]

I made the mistake of reading this right before I go to bed. Now I'll be having naughty dreams about werewolves playing strip poker...

*chuckles* Maybe that was my intention all along. ;)

Glad you liked it!

[mrstater]

I like depictions of Remus not being shy about romance or sex, so good job with bringing out that confident Marauderish side we see in the books prior to HBP. I was, however, surprised and confused when they did start getting more intimate with each other, because their greeting at the beginning of the fic seems formal, and almost as if they don't know each other very well: if they're in love, wouldn't Tonks know Remus' reading habits, and wouldn't he know why she was at the Burrow?

There are some nice canon touches in this - the poltergeist in the attic (isn't it a ghoul, though, in the books?), I like particularly. If you're interested in expanding this fic, it could be really fun to work the ghoul in more -- it would be truly unique and funny to see Remus and Tonks contending with a pesky ghoul during a game of strip poker. :)

[devonwood]

...if they're in love, wouldn't Tonks know Remus' reading habits, and wouldn't he know why she was at the Burrow?

I believe I made the mistake of editing too much out in the first draft of this. In the original one I concieved in my head, Tonks and Remus are still at that stage where they don't want anyone else to know about their relationship. So, out of habit, they are accustomed to speaking formally (or, at least not lovingly) to each other. And Tonks's "reading habits" comment was more of a jibe at him than a serious question. :D

There are some nice canon touches in this - the poltergeist in the attic (isn't it a ghoul, though, in the books?),

Probably. I couldn't find the exact quote in the books, so I just guessed. *sheepish grin*

-- it would be truly unique and funny to see Remus and Tonks contending with a pesky ghoul during a game of strip poker. :)

Now, that does beg to be written about. ;) XD Thank you for the review.

[sea_thoughts]

It seems like we have two different stories here. There's the first part, where they get locked in the attic and play strip poker, then there's the second part, which deals with the morning after. I don't feel that there is much connection between the two. You could easily have left it with them waking up slightly embarassed from the night before and coming to terms with what had happened, rather then making them go further. That said, I did like the glimpses of Remus's playful humour. I'm only wondering why Sirius was at the Burrow.

[devonwood]

I'm only wondering why Sirius was at the Burrow.

A better question is probably why *isn't* Sirius at the Burrow. XD

I realized too late that I made the mistake of editing too much out of this during the first draft. There was this long paragraph on how all of the Order was coming to the Burrow for a big winter feast (another thing I forgot to include, that it's near Christmastime), so Sirius was allowed out of Grimmauld to come. That led into Remus telling Tonks how Sirius had most likely thought up a story as to their wherabouts.

I must confess that I put a little more thought into the first half than the second half, so the transition wasn't very good. If I get time eventually, I'll go back and edit that, or maybe rework the second piece altogether.

Thank you for your criticism! :)

[phe_o]

I really liked your use of the prompt items (especially those sweaters!) and your tasteful penning of such an intimate scene. I had some questions (Sirius? poltergeist?) but I think most were answered in the other reviews! :)

[lady_bracknell]

I really liked the begining of this - especially the idea of Tonks morphing to pull off a more realistic sickie, and I liked their banter in the aftermath of their poker game (made me think I'd have liked to actually see them play the game, rather than just having them appear half-naked

[devonwood]

Thank you! :D

I think eventually I'm going to rewrite this whole thing (if I can get myself off of my lazy arse...). Probably rework the entire second half, and maybe include more of that Strip Poker seen, although goodness knows I'm a frightful poker player. ;)