Broken by bratty_jedi

[bratty_jedi]

Title: Broken
Author: bratty_jedi
Rating & Warnings: Should be good for all audiences and sad is really the only warning I need to/can give.
Prompts: Fragile
Word Count: c. 600
Summary: "It will be a nice change to not spend your birthday cleaning the remnants of breakfast out of our bed after you've somehow managed to dump your tray or helping you repair

Comments

[bway_love]

Ohhh. That was so sad and touching and the flashback in the middle with the jollyness contrasting made it very real. I got a big Gobstone-like lump in my throat at the end with the really vivid image of Remus alone in a cold gloomy house clinging desparately to picking up broken dishes.

[bratty_jedi]

Thanks so much for your lovely words. I was hoping the contrast between the comfort, togetherness, and fun of the flashback would make the ending more poignant. I'm very glad this produced such a strong reaction from you.

[phe_o]

Oh, what a truly fitting remembrance piece for Tonks. I love this original take and how you've constructed it through the memory. Really lovely work.

[bratty_jedi]

Thank you very much. It took me a bit to figure out exactly how and where to piece the two parts together. I'm glad you like the end result.

[lady_bracknell]

Oh, that's so sad. So many people write Tonks being left alone, it was really refreshing to read Remus in that situation.

You delivered it very deftly, too. The tone was just right.

[bratty_jedi]

Refreshingly different and deftly done? That's high praise my dear! Thanks so much :)

[appyangel94]

That was really good. I loved the flashback and the ending especially. Great job.

[bratty_jedi]

Thanks so much. I'm happy to hear you like it.

[mrstater]

Ouch. This piece is exquisitely painful. Even moreso because the flashback is so snarky and light and them.

He could undoubtedly lift the spell entirely, but he knew that as painful as it was to repair the broken dishes alone on the anniversary of her birth, far worse would be the year when the effects of the spell had worn off completely and even this piece of her was gone forever.

What an aching turn of phrase. It really gets me.

Lovely work.

[bratty_jedi]

Thanks so much. I always feel a bit funny when I get a strong sad reaction out of people. Should I be happy because I was able to illicit a strong emotion, the very one I was going for, or should I feel bad for upsetting people?

Slight tangent: somehow you quoting that back to me just made me realize that one of the first lines I had in my head for this ended up getting deleted and isn't in the finished piece. I may have to think about trying to edit it back in later...