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Asinus Protego (2/?)

Jun 26, 2007 20:56

Title: Asinus Protego (2/?)
Author: godricgal
Ratings and Warnings: R for sexual content.
Word Count: 4518
Prompts: Chance, "I've been able to see them ever since my first year here. They've always pulled the carriages. Don't worry. You're just as sane as I am."
Summary: Just days after Dumbledore's funeral, when Remus and Tonks are working to rebuild ( Read more... )

romance, mystery/suspense, last chance full moon showdown, drama, godricgal

Comments 20

baby_werewolf June 26 2007, 21:19:03 UTC

You write a very good Luna.

Not that the rest of the fic isn't brilliant, but Luna stood out as actually sounding Luna-ish, which she quite often doesn't in fanfic

godricgal June 27 2007, 19:48:19 UTC

Thank you very much! I found Luna to be a lot of fun to write. She will be back in this fic. :)

cae_prince June 27 2007, 02:30:18 UTC

Sorry I wasn't around o review the first part of this amazing series.

First off, the storyline right, from ono-centaurs to the possible mystery of the Dean Forest, is very novel and intriguing. I can't wait to see what happens there and especially how all this ties in with making Voldemort history.

And I quite agree with baby_werewolf, there's not many who can make Luna be Luna. You've done her character admirably and concisely. I love how you make her so perplexing and yet her desperation for her father shows through all that. Since its Tonks first encounter with her, her bafflement is quite the way I picture it to be. And Remus would have already had a year's worth of Luna-isms when he taught her that single year, so I can see him being amused but quite used to her strangeness. You've done a perfect job with their interaction ( ... )

godricgal June 30 2007, 22:51:29 UTC

Thank you!

It really does make me so happy to hear that Luna is convincing, because, if you write her, she really does need to be right for the story to work, and I really didn't think I could pull it off, nor was I sure I had, so thank you.

And thanks for saying that the R/T relationship is the best of the fic, because I'm trying to do something plotty but keep the 'ship as an equal plot -- almost to let them recover what they had by realising how well they work together and how much they rely on each other in difficult times.

Again, thank you, you always leave such thoughtful reviews. :)

katyhasclogs June 27 2007, 08:05:52 UTC

Oh Squee! They're getting married! The ending of that chapter was sooo lovely; I've gone all squishy and happy inside.

The mystery plotline is getting really interesting too. I really like how you're combining a quite detailed account of their relationship with such an exciting plot.

And you did very well with Luna, she's quite an easy character to get wrong, I think (I know I wouldn't have the nerve to write her) but you've written her very convincingly.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

godricgal June 30 2007, 22:59:42 UTC

Yay! I'm so glad you liked the ending!

I'm intending that the fic continues to balance the relationship and the plot, so I hope it can sustain itself for the rest of the story. I'm very much looking forward to writing the last scene and not jumping ahead is getting quite difficult!

Luna isn't difficult to get wrong, and I've been gearing up to writing her for a while now, and I wasn't sure that I'd got her right so I'm very pleased theat you think she's convincing.

Thanks for a lovely review and I'll try and have the next chapter up asap.

anoipua June 27 2007, 15:12:02 UTC

oooh. I'm hooked. You've got a mystery, and romance, and Luna babbling about insane stuff. Perfect!

godricgal June 30 2007, 23:00:41 UTC

Thanks! Hopefully I'll have the next chapter up soonish! I'm happy to hear you're enjoying it. :)

gilpin25 June 30 2007, 20:36:44 UTC

I'm highly suspicious of that shop and I think Tonks should be, too. Except I'll let her off for a bit as she's obviously got a lot on her mind, like Remus. And rings and things. ;)

Thought you wrote a super, convincing Luna with the acorns in her ears, and it was a neat bit of backstory that Tonks knew her because Remus had brought her pictures of the children in hospital that fought with Harry at the Ministry. Exactly the sort of thing an Order member, and an Auror, would do; as well as a writer avoiding any possible plot holes. ;) I do like the idea of Wrackspurts, it's such a good name and it was nice how it became a recurring joke between R/T. And I'm wondering why Luna's Dad would be placed under the Imperius Curse?

The proposal is one of the loveliest I've read, especially as it takes place in a real 'love' scene as well. I always think they must be hard to write but this reads exactly like the line that Tonks thinks:

This was real romance: sharing a quiet moment of truth that was so moving because it meant so much to ( ... )

godricgal June 30 2007, 23:14:47 UTC

I'll not say anything about the shop, just yet, I'm not sure if I have time to include it, if I'm to finish this in time.

...and it was a neat bit of backstory that Tonks knew her because Remus had brought her pictures of the children in hospital that fought with Harry at the Ministry. Exactly the sort of thing an Order member, and an Auror, would do; as well as a writer avoiding any possible plot holes. ;)

LOL. I played around with this so much, then realised that Tonks was either fighting wicked DEs or zonked out with Moody in attendance rather than making formal introductions to teenage vigilanties, so I had to come up with something. ;)

I'm glad you liked the proposal scene. It was the oneI worried about the most.

I will be coming to you for Forest of Dean advice. I wouldn't be too worried about not having seen Feral Fairies -- nasty things -- much worse than gnats. ;)

Thank you for a lovely review, and for picking out those lines. I hope you enjoy the next chapter. :)