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[devonwood]

Title: I Know Why The Caged Wolf Sings
Author: Devonwood
Format & Word Count: Fic; 4800 approx.
Rating: PG-13/T
Prompts: Hiccupping Solution; Molly/Arthur Weasley, Hermione, Fred/George Weasley; Stare; Drama/Angst
Warning: Violence, Character Death (OC)
Summary: When Remus is captured by Death Eaters, Tonks uses her...family ties...to try and get him

Comments

[lady_bracknell]

I can't wait to read the next part. This is a really gripping idea, and you wrote it compellingly. The DEs were sinister enough, as was Bellatrix, to make that whole scene chilling, and the idea of Tonks as spy is really interesting, even if she's faking.

I thought your OC was well-used, too - it was all about Remus' reaction to what happened to him, rather than the fate of Gary himself.

Great stuff.

[devonwood]

Sorry this reply is so late. Catching up on the reading, and whatnot.

Thank you for the lovely comments! Tonks the spy was difficult to write. I wanted it to be believable, but not believable....and I know that makes absolutely no sense. =D

I thought your OC was well-used, too - it was all about Remus' reaction to what happened to him, rather than the fate of Gary himself.

I'm always a little hesitant to include OCs, but I felt that there needed to be another "good guy" apart from Remus and Tonks. I'm glad that you liked his appearance.

Once again, thank you very much. ;D

[mrstater]

This is and awesome plot and seriously some of the best writing I've seen from you

[devonwood]

This is and awesome plot and seriously some of the best writing I've seen from you.

*blush* Thank you very much!

I especially like the line about Enough House and how Remus had had enough of it already.

Oh, Great Expectations. You don't know how badly I wanted to work the phrase "Don't cut my throat, sir!" into this fic. =D

(One bit of concrit, it struck me as odd that Remus addressed her as Bella.)

Bellatrix seemed to be too many syllables. And now that I reread it, that does seem a little odd. I'll go back and change that. :)

Poor Remus, he just has one confusion after another, doesn't he? Tonks not loving him was a painful blow, but I think losing the love of his friends was even more hurtful. He always had a thought in his mind that Tonks would eventually leave him, but never the Order.

After I finish up another one-shot I've been forced into writing, the rest of this will definitely be on the way. Thanks again for the lovely review!

[devonwood]

and Bellatrix is creepy evil here, not over the top evil, if that makes any sense.

That made sense to me. =D Bellatrix is such an interesting and complex character, and I would love to learn more about her. C'mon, JKR! lol

Thank you for the great review!

[no_sweeter_song]

Oh please tell me you have posted or will be posting the rest soon! I'm hooked. I, of course, never doubted her! But still. It's a compelling read, keeps you wanting more, and I love the addition of Gary-shows Remus almost as a father figure and how much it must've hurt him for the boy to die. Beautiful work.

[devonwood]

Unfortunately, the rest of this isn't posted yet. I got roped in to writing a chapter to a community fic, and that has to take precedence over this (they're all waiting with pitchforks and torches if I don't complete it on time. =D)

Thanks for the lovely review, and I'm glad you enjoyed Gary, lol.

[iamweebles]

This was wonderfully well done! You've done the tension and the characterisations of the Death Eaters so vividly; it's a very exciting read! And I too am looking forward to reading the conclusion.

[devonwood]

Thank you for the review!

Bellatrix's characterization was the toughest for me. I tried to make her evil, and not just crazy and sadistic. ....If that makes any sense, lol.