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Witch's Brew

Feb 21, 2007 08:00

Title: Witch’s Brew
Author: bratanimus
Format and Word Count: Fic, 7083 words
Ratings & Warnings: PG-13, “drug” use
Prompts: Euphoria Elixir; Mad-Eye, Ginny, or Hermione; Sing; Drama or Romantic Comedy
Summary: Everything made sense now, and Remus wondered why he had waited so long to fall into this perfect logic.
Author’s Notes: This is a piece I ( Read more... )

bratanimus, romantic comedy, lovers' moon fic jumble

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bratanimus February 24 2007, 21:39:50 UTC

I was worried for a minute that you weren't going to get them together in the end, that Remus would think it was only the Euphoria Elixir and not be willing to explore the possibility of a relationship, so I'm glad that wasn't the case!

How could I leave them hanging like that? ;) I'm happy you liked this fic, especially Remus' characterization. Thanks for the kind words!

lady_bracknell February 23 2007, 18:05:37 UTC

I was completely and utterly in love with this, even before you got to Our Lips Are Sealed, which is one of my favourite pop songs of all time, and then I was just giddy and head over heels.

This is really, really, brilliant. I love it when you write clubbing, because you always set the scene so evocatively, it's like I've been to a place just like that hundreds of times, and I can see all the regulars in their places. And Remus' outift was just perfect, as was te tension between them - and you write Remus disbelieving the signs Tonks is giving him so well.

I loved the way you wrote in the sing prompt, too - just the thought of Remus singing My Funny Valentine in his husky voice is enough to make me slightly goo-ey at the knees. Mad-Eye was perfect, too. I just loved him chastising them like children.

Fabulous kissing scenes, too.

This is definitely my favourite piece from the Jumble so far. I enjoyed every second.

bratanimus February 24 2007, 21:47:11 UTC

... Our Lips Are Sealed, which is one of my favourite pop songs of all time ...

Mine, too! :D

I love it when you write clubbing, because you always set the scene so evocatively ...

Thank you! I meant to comment on your piece What Was Necessary that I thought you did a tremendous job of setting the scene of that warehouse. Just brilliant, with lots of great images, and subtle too. You never need to fear about too-obvious scene setting.

Glad you liked Remus' outfit. I got a little giddy at the thought of that, myself. ;) And I'm very happy that Remus' singing made you gooey at the knees (see my post above to mrstater for the story behind the singing).

I really liked writing Mad-Eye (I think I've left his hyphen out in the story, doh!). He was surprisingly fun to write. I think he and Snape are my two favorites to write besides R/T.

Again, thanks for the lovely review I'm very glad you enjoyed it!

jncar February 24 2007, 04:24:53 UTC

This was delightful!

Everything was so well described, and vivid that I could really see it in my mind. It was so much fun watching their flirting escalate higher and higher into the snogging as they started getting giddy on the potion, and the singing was priceless.

Your Moody was spot on, and quite funny.

But my favorite part was that you had both Remus and Tonks as confident enough characters that instead of being mortified about what they'd done on the potion, they just had a good laugh about it and decided to follow their instincts. :)

Great story--thanks for sharing!

bratanimus February 24 2007, 21:50:56 UTC

Hee hee, glad you liked the escalation of their euphoria and the flirting into snogging, singing, and nose-tweaking. :)

I'm happy that you liked the descriptions, and that you thought I did justice to Moody. He was fun to write!

But my favorite part was that you had both Remus and Tonks as confident enough characters that instead of being mortified about what they'd done on the potion, they just had a good laugh about it and decided to follow their instincts. :)

Thanks! I figured they've already seen each other at their silliest, so there was nothing left to lose. Also, the Elixir only enabled them to do what they'd been itching to do in the first place. ;)

Thanks again for the thoughtful review!

molly_coddles February 24 2007, 05:44:06 UTC

Wonderful, fun fic! Full of delightful imagery, such as:
playing the role of the quiet, stodgy old fellow while he fairly itched for her to take the jumper off him by force.
Lots of other great lines as well. I really enjoyed this!

bratanimus February 24 2007, 21:52:34 UTC

I'm so glad you liked it! The jumper line was one of my favorites, so I'm glad you got a kick out of it too. ;) Thanks for the nice words!

wildmagelet February 24 2007, 07:15:27 UTC

=)

I love how fun it is, even with the underlying seriousness of the mission. Actually, I think you showed really well how the seriousness of a situation can disintegrate under the influence, lol. But the kissing and the giggling and just the closeness between them was really, really enjoyable to read. Which a bratanimus fic always is, but I loved your venture into romantic comedy!

Favourite lines would have to be:

Sirius had long ago dubbed Remus the Duke of Dodging - I suppose it's better than the Dodgy Duke, anyway! :)

and And he had a weird urge to tweak her nose., which made me join the giggling even though I didn't feel particularly amused by my day today before I read this.

Lovely to read!

bratanimus February 24 2007, 21:55:55 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm really happy you thought this venture into romantic comedy was successful. I certainly had a lot of fun writing it. Actually, I could have gone on and on, but fortunately I had a deadline. ;)

Glad you liked the Duke of Dodging line. I wanted to let Remus rise to a higher position (king of the kitchen) by the end, and hopefully he earned it. :)

Thanks again for the kind words. Glad you got a giggle out of it! :D