Blue Eyes

[godricgal]

Title: Blue Eyes
Author: mrstater
Format & Word Count: Fic, 1000 words
Rating: PG
Prompt: "blue eyes"
Summary: Remus spends Valentine's Day with a natural redhead, and discovers the merits of poetry as a Defence Against the Dark Arts.

Comments

[phe_o]

This was so fantastic, if not for its sweetness, then for the dead-on characterization. Tonks' poem is completely believably coming from her, and Remus' assurance about the patronus was from him. I just love this.

And the whole conversation with Bill is priceless, too!

[mrstater]

I'm so very glad to know you liked this and felt the characterizations worked. I had a lot of fun with Bill and Remus and Tonks' silly poem. Thanks very much for your lovely words.

[bratanimus]

Hee hee! Wonderful. I liked this a lot. Loved Remus and Bill getting stuck together for V-Day, poor blokes. Their banter was lovely, and the joking about Mad-Eye was hilarious. :D The poem seemed just like something Tonks would write: earnest and self-deprecating. Great use of the prompt; I was tickled pink that he used his own new nickname as he drove the dementors away. Very nice work.

[mrstater]

People always focus on women and Valentine's Day, but I thought Remus and Bill seemed like the types to want to make a big deal about it for their girlfriends. So I'm really glad you liked how I started it with them, and I'm especially glad you liked the poem, since that's what inspired the whole thing. Thank you very much for your comments!

[shimotsuki]

Moody letting down his guard enough to go out on a date?! Now that's a Valentine's image to remember.

Making the card blue was inspired. It's a nice example of Tonks doing the unexpected, and it goes along with the blue-eyes theme. And that poem -- perfect! The slightly clunky scansion and sudden appearance of words like "crap" is just right for Tonks, but the way it captures the different kinds of looks Remus gives her shows how well she understands him.

I enjoyed this very much. (And I think I know who you are.)

[mrstater]

Thank you for this lovely review. It's always nice to know the little details that went into it didn't go unnoticed, and I'm thrilled you liked it!

And did you guess right? ;)

[shwenny]

Hahahaha!
I love Tonks poem. Its so like her to do something heartfelt that remains silly. Tis part of her charm. Loved the banter between Bill and Remus, could just imagine the look on Remus face when he says "Now I'm offended," said Remus. "I've a far prettier face than a Dementor." hehe
Especially liked the stanza

"This poem is crap,
But I'm telling you true,
Your eyes are my charm
When I'm feeling blue."

[mrstater]

Thank you very much! The poem idea struck me right away when I got this prompt, but I was a little nervous about whether it worked from Tonks -- not to mention about writing the poem, because poetry's so not my thing. But it helped to think of it from the perspective of silly and knowing it's silly, but writing it away. I'm very pleased you felt it captured Tonks. :)

[sea_thoughts]

This is adorable! The Valentine poem is cute and amusing but I think my favourite part is the banter between Bill and Remus at the end, as I don't see them interact that much in fanfic. Points for that. :)

[mrstater]

Thank you so much! I'm really pleased you liked the Bill and Remus talk in this. I really like that bond they share because of The Werewolf Thing and like the idea that they'd have had a friendship before hand, since Remus is so close to the Weasleys.