Smoke and Wind

[mrstater]

Title: Smoke and Wind
Author: jncar
Format and word count: Ficlet, 974
Rating: PG
Warnings: OC
Prompt: “It’s Love”
Summary: “She decides that turnabout is fair play-if he can bring up her least favorite subject, then she can bring up his. She asks him about his love life.”
Author’s Notes: This isn’t really Valentine-y, but it’s what wanted to be written

Comments

[codenamelily]

I can see why this would want to be written - it's so sweet! I adore the way you've written Remus' mother. I can just imagine her. She's obviously a caring woman, but there's a little bit of bitterness too, like when she is thinking about how magic couldn't cure her son. The choice to make her a smoker just adds to that. I would love to see the meeting between Remus' mother and Tonks, especially after Remus goes on about her like that =)

[jncar]

Thanks! I didn't used to think that there would be a believable way to write a living parent for Remus, but then this mother popped into my head and wouldn't go away.

I'm glad you liked it.

[iamweebles]

I really love this sort of blowsy, sad yet loving portrayal of his mum. I know I've said before that I am not particularly fond of Remus having a living family, but this story really does an end-run around that objection. This Mrs. Lupin is completely believable to me as someone who could be in Remus' life - a woman who could have taught him how to be so kind, and yet also so closed off. She obviously still alien to the magical world, and Remus seems to hold the essence of that apartness.

[jncar]

Thanks!

I didn't used to like the idea of him having living parents either, but when she popped into my head, this version just caught my imagination. I'm glad you like her. :)

[author_by_night]

I really enjoyed reading this. Your Mrs. Lupin, for all her bitterness and such, is somehow endearing. :)

It's nice to read other takes on the Remus/Tonks relationship, too, and yours did a good job on it. So - well done!

[jncar]

Thanks! I'm glad you like my Mrs. Lupin.

[anoipua]

This is so nice. It's a great version of Mrs. Lupin.

What good is magic, if it can’t cure cancer?

What good indeed? She thinks to herself, taking another drag. It couldn’t cure my boy.

I like this line in particular, because of course a mother would feel that way.

Bravo

[jncar]

Thank you very much.

Those are some of my favorite lines, as well.

[scarlett71177]

Extremely interesting take on the prompt. I like that you thought outside of the box and wrote something un-valentinesy.

I agree with the others- I like this portrayl of Mrs Lupin and her cynic attitude- especially regarding magic and what it can cure. That's powerful.

I like the hesitancy the two of them have, but that Remus loves her enough to let her in to this important part of his life.

Well done!

[jncar]

Thanks! I guess I just wasn't feeling Valentinesy when I wrote this, but I'm happy with how it turned out. I'm glad you enjoyed it.