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kerrymdb in metamorfic_moon

The Writing on the Window

Dec 22, 2006 20:53

Title: The Writing on the Window
Author: kerrymdb
Format: Fic
Rating & Warnings: R for sexual situations
Prompts: Forest and a snowman
Word Count: 3, 955
Summary: He doesn’t want this moment to end. Because when it does, there will be questions and demands for answers from both sides that neither are ready to answer nor ask.
Author’s Notes: I wrote ( Read more... )

kerrymdb, angst, christmas moon fic advent

Comments 35

molly_coddles December 25 2006, 17:29:21 UTC

Merry Christmas!

I can't tell you how many times I've started reviewing this fic and got sidetracked reading it again, running out of time for leaving a comment.

I like that Remus finds Tonks laughing and having fun. Shows that she isn't completely incapacitated - she might not be able to morph and her patronus may have changed, but she's still able to get on with life and find some enjoyment.

Very strong messages with the writing on the window. And her 'gift' to him, rather puts a new twist on things. It really is more draining to send off someone with a blessing and 'don't worry about me,' than a rant.

Lovely fic, I've really enjoyed it - several times!;)

kerrymdb December 26 2006, 06:05:30 UTC

And a merry Christmas to you, too!

I like that Remus finds Tonks laughing and having fun.
I wanted to make Remus really conflicted. He's heard all the stories, but hasn't seen her. So when he saw her and she was laughing, he didn't know who to believe anymore.

I liked having them write on the windows, because there seems that they have so much to say to each other, but aren't sure how to say it. And then the words gradually disappear, leaving only them.

I'm so glad you enjoyed it and thought it worth a re-read! Thank you! :)

scarlett71177 December 26 2006, 06:49:18 UTC

Loved the concept of this- writing on windows to convey the message you just can't bear to say sometimes. I think it's so sweet and lovely

Wonderful job.

Amy

P.S. The carol is great, too!

kerrymdb December 26 2006, 18:14:10 UTC

Loved the concept of this
Thank you! Odd to say I had fun on such an angsty piece, but once I figured that out, I really did.

I'm glad you liked the carol. I wanted something straight out of the Quibbler.

Thank you for reading! :)

mrstater December 26 2006, 22:39:01 UTC

You didn't happen to see an HGTV extreme Christmas decorations special which included the world's biggest snowman, did you? I'd just watched it when I found this the other night (sorry it's taken me so long to get around to reviewing!) and was totally amused by the almost traffic-cone nose ( ... )

kerrymdb December 27 2006, 10:21:40 UTC

No, I didn't see that special. Sounds like fun, though. :) HGTV is one of my secret passions, even though I don't know neither home nor garden...

I'm really glad you like Remus' voice. I've never written anything but fluff from his presceptive before, so I was a little nervous about getting the angst right. Cause I wanted it really angsty! ;)

"Remus and Tonks have angsty sex during Christmas, HBP" is so often doneI know...that was one of the reasons why I abandoned this in the beginning. But I figured that the reality is that the sex is not even close to the focus of the story that it would be okay ( ... )

mrstater December 27 2006, 13:36:15 UTC

Oh, yay! I do hope you get a chance to write that bunny. :)

gilpin25 December 27 2006, 18:39:16 UTC

This is my third read of your story and I'm going to get the review done to go with it this time! I always look forward to yours because you always come up with something just that bit different, and you've certainly done that here in some style ( ... )

kerrymdb December 28 2006, 04:58:09 UTC

I can't tell you how happy it makes me that you found this worth re-reading!

'Tonks in pieces' that is so often depicted.
Heh. I'm guilty of that in another story, so that's why I wanted to try a completely different angle of the breakup. It's so easy to make her a brat in these scenes, but I really wanted her to seem 'wise beyond her years' so to say.

I'm glad you liked the changes before the sex scene. That's all thanks to devonwood. Like you said, it makes the justification much more realisitic.

Surrounding words by laughter does not make them less real
I'm so excited that you quoted that line, because I agonized over it; trying to make it just right, since I feel it's such an important line and sums them up a lot.

It's also a positive ending for the reader
So happy you think so! I can't stand angsty pieces that don't offer the reader any hope, just lots and lots of angst, so I wanted to avoid that at all costs. :)

Thank you for your comments! :)

jncar December 29 2006, 00:46:36 UTC

The other reviewers have made all my comments for me, so I'll just say "ditto" to the above, and add that I particularly liked the idea of him finding Tonks happy and playful, and the idea of her supporting and encouraging him in his mission, and giving him happy memories to take with him. Lovely ideas. :)

kerrymdb December 29 2006, 03:15:30 UTC

Thank you very much for taking the time to say 'ditto!' lol! I'm glad you liked seeing her happy. There had to be some happy times during their seperation, otherwise she would have been ready to AK herself.

Thank you for reading and commenting...I'm off to get a Hershey's kiss thanks to your icon... :)