I really liked the style of this, it gives such a striking image of the scene and you really feel like an intruder watching a private moment between them which you don't really get with first person pov. It made the heartbreak on both sides really clear. I liked the descriptions of the photos on the mantle and particularly the contrast between the last picture and the current situation. And oh this: He has left her alone once more and the form beneath the blankets on the bed trembles. Just makes me want to jump right into the story and give Tonks the biggest hug.
Both of them need big hugs - they are having a tough year.
I'm really glad that you liked it and that the two sidedness of the heartbreak was there. I liked tackling this from the outsiders perspective, giving it a more TV like approach to it, instead of focusing on one persons point of view.
I agree with everyone else. This is really nicely written and the second person POV works so well. You've got a really lovely writing style. It's very refreshing. Nicely done. :)
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He has left her alone once more and the form beneath the blankets on the bed trembles.
Just makes me want to jump right into the story and give Tonks the biggest hug.
Really well done!
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I'm really glad that you liked it and that the two sidedness of the heartbreak was there. I liked tackling this from the outsiders perspective, giving it a more TV like approach to it, instead of focusing on one persons point of view.
Thanks!
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