FIC: Explanations

[roh_wyn]

Title: Explanations
Author: roh_wyn
Rating & Warnings: G, no warnings
Prompts: Day of Mistakes, Mrs. Scower's Magical Mess Remover, kitchen, angst/humor
Word Count: 1360
Summary: This is my attempt at addressing the one part of Deathly Hallows I totally loathed (not to say I loved any part of the book). I'm not sure this fic makes a lot of sense or is

Comments

[bookish_brownie]

I liked your explorations of the various characters' reasons for doing what they do. There's often not room in canon for these characters' motivations, and they're important. As others have mentioned, I liked the parallels between Tonks and Andromeda and Remus and Ted. The last few lines added a nice, lighter touch. Good job!

[shimotsuki]

Angst and humor can be a tricky pair of genres to combine, but you handle the mix really well here.

As others have said, I like the explicit parallel between the two couples, and the way this influences how Tonks and Andromeda see each other, and what Andromeda thinks of Remus.

I also really like Remus's sudden moment of self-awareness, but it's sad, too, because I think Tonks may have been the one person who really did trust him completely -- and I wonder if Remus damaged that himself by leaving for the wrong reasons. Although it seems Tonks understands him pretty well here, in her talk with her mother, so maybe he does still have her trust at least.

[gppr]

There is a lot of contrast between this piece and 31 Flavors. It was interesting to read one after the other. I like how you conveyed the character's emotions, be it with dialogue or the images you describe, like the storm in the kitchen, for example.
I felt almost like a play to me, it was so visual. Nicely done.