FIC: The Promise

[jesspallas]

Title: The Promise
Author: jesspallas
Rating: PG-13
Prompts: Bard prompt:
"Come, madam wife, sit by my side, and let the
world slip, we shall ne'er be younger."
The Taming Of The Shrew (induction, scene 2, lines 143-144)
Single-word prompt: Promise
Word Count: 1394
Summary: But I couldn’t lie to her. I couldn’t deny her. She deserved so much better than a

Comments

[tehkenz]

Not rubbish at ALL, dear! This is just BEAUTIFUL.

Actually, not only is it beautiful, it's very realistic, in my opinion. There are a lot of fics out there that have Remus and Tonks just run into each other's arms and everything's all right.

I think that the shock of Remus leaving her AGAIN probably meant that they had to almost start from scratch as far as trust was concerned.

Once again, amazing fic! (Thank Merlin for system failures at work! xD)

[jesspallas]

Thank you. :) And I couldn't see Tonks just accepting it after all she went through the year before but at the same time, I couldn't see her turning him away so this seemed a good middle ground. :)

[mssarajevo]

I always enjoy your work so much, and this is no exception. I've noticed that in these comments no one really give constructive criticism (not often, anyway), so I don't know if it's taboo to do so - but I did notice a few run-on sentences, and I wonder if the language isn't a bit formal ... although I know that first-person introspection does tend to be more formal than straight dialogue. Anyway, that said, you're one of the best fan fiction writers I've come across, and a damn sight better than a lot of published authors, too!

[jesspallas]

The formality of the language occurred to me too but that was just how it came out so I just ran with it. The sentances were supposed to be a bit rambling, in an effort to follow the way thought tends to works. And no fear, concrit is certainly not taboo. Thanks for your remarks! :)

[merryb87]

This was amazingly wonderful, and I found no rubbish what-so ever. I love how you wrote this moment, you can feel Remus' guilt and see Tonks's hurt. And I just love how Remus tells her everything because he doesn't want his marriage to be based on a lie...and gah, wonderful work yet again!

[jesspallas]

Thank you muchly! :)

[shimotsuki]

I've been hoping for a while that you would write The Slap, so I'm very glad you had a system failure at work! I'd agree that it's going to take a special kind of apology for Remus to be able to go home after this particular departure, and I really like the way you've done that with eyes and gestures, as a way of setting it apart from the words of promise that didn't work before. I also applaud Remus for being honest about what he'd done -- it's so like him to do that, and so important.

[jesspallas]

I've been meaning to write The Slap in some form or another for several challenges now but so many people have done a take on that scene that I wanted to wait until I found a way to do it that was a bit different and this just popped into my head after the work ran out. I'm glad it rang true for you. Thanks! :)

[sspring92]

This is you unbeated and off the top of your head?! Howly cow girl! I'm always very happy to see a fic from you, and we don't see them often enough! Thanks so much for posting

[jesspallas]

I know, I know, I never seem to have much time for writing these days! It's a miracle I even found time to do these replies! Thanks for your remarks! :)