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modestyrabnott in metamorfic_moon

Of Magpies and Mirth

Oct 12, 2006 01:07

Title: Of Magpies and Mirth
Author: ModestyRabnott
Prompts: A Demiguise, Myrtle's Bathroom, A Day of Fortune, Action/Adventure
Rating and warnings: All Audiences
Word Count: 2946
Summary: On a preliminary assignment for the Order, Remus makes a new acquaintance.
Author’s Notes: A very special thanks to
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half moon rising fic jumble, action/adventure, modestyrabnott

Comments 14

sea_thoughts October 12 2006, 02:11:37 UTC

What a lovely introduction. I loved Tonks's attempt at dignity and Remus's curiosity and puzzlement turning to amusement and a small hint of the affection to come. Tonks's personality was so fresh and forthright, I could really understand why Remus was attracted to her. The drama of the Demiguise capture was great fun to read. The only thing that struck me wrong was Tonks's remark about Remus being a boffin, which made me think And being a boffin is a terrible tragedy, isn't it? It rubbed me the wrong way for a moment. I loved Remus's puzzlement at the end.

devonwood October 12 2006, 04:02:32 UTC

That's so cute, the pair of them arguing over magpies. :D What a great way to set up their relationship. "Well, I like you too" :)

freakinwinky October 12 2006, 06:40:40 UTC

I have to say this is possibly the best characterization of Tonks and Remus (particularly Tonks), I've read in fanfiction! In Tonks' dialouge, most authors (including myself I'm sorry to say), seem uncomfortable with emphasising her unpredictability and willingness to speak her mind with a slight obliviousness to the opinions of those around her. I thought you portrayed that aspect of her personality exceptionally well which in turn made her a very well rounded character.

I also love the premis of this story, very believable first meeting for them. Great job!

lady_bracknell October 12 2006, 13:00:10 UTC

Really enjoyed this take on their first meeting. I particularly liked Remus' mixture of intrigue and confusion about Tonks - I always imagine he'd like a girl who'd keep him guessing, and the mixture of humour, intelligence and forthrightness you gave Tonks was perfect to pique his interest.

I particularly liked the bit with Tonks feeling sorry for the demiguise - so very few people make her caring, and yet she must be to do what she does.

Very nicely done - and not an easy set of prompts ;).

gijane7702 October 12 2006, 15:26:42 UTC

Nice takes on the prompts. They were rough!

I loved it. Such a funny take on their first meeting.

Love the end: “I like you, Remus Lupin.” It was a proclamation of the most definitive sort. He got the impression that once she made her mind up about something she was unlikely to change it. And this made the comment all the more flattering.

He wasn’t sure what his response should be, so he resumed teasing tone which had worked well with her thus far. “Is that so?”

“Yeah, I do.You seemed like a bit of a boffin at first, but I’ve changed my mind. You’re fun.”

“Well, I like you as well, Nym- er, Ms. Tonks.” And he did. She was a breath of fresh air. And he couldn’t wait to witness her reception by certain Order members. Something to look forward to indeed.

That was great. You should, if you can with your next round of prompts, with the Order's reaction to her. =)