Title: Under the Influence
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mocca_fix_goldRating: G
Prompts: Christmas wreath
"Everybody knows a turkey and some mistletoe,
Help to make the season bright,
Tiny tots with their eyes all a-glow,
Will find it hard to sleep tonight."
- The Christmas Song - Nat King Cole
Word Count: 2,411
Summary: It doesn't feel like Christmas for Nymphadora Tonks.
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I really like your Tonks and the detail she always remembers everything in, like the stray thread on Remus' Molly-knit jumper. It's so girl-in-love. And I want to know just what it was Remus did when Tonks cast that cheering charm on Snape, lol.
Really well done, I liked this so much!
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As for what Remus did, my original idea was that he had locked happy!Snape and Sirius up in a room to repay Sirius for doing something that was embarrassing for Remus, something involving Remus' fascination with Tonks. Sirius had spent the time torn between amusement at happy!Snape and horror at Snape gleefully expressing his desire to be best friends with Sirius during their incarceration. Only I couldn't figure out exactly what Sirius would've done to embarrass Remus in the first place, so it was for the best that that part was left hanging.
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I really like the way you handle Remus here, with all his conflicting emotions -- he thinks he shouldn't be there, but he can't make himself leave, so instead he won't look at Tonks... ouch. And, If he leaned too, they might be able to kiss. That's a great image on its own, but also really symbolic of the state of their relationship. And I thought it was interesting and tantalizing that you never show us what gifts they gave each other. Now I'm curious!
Really liked the last scene, too, with Ted and Andromeda trying to comfort Tonks -- even though it only works for a little while. She doesn’t want to continue imagining them as Remus when they actually want to be with her. Aww.
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Remus was a bit problematic at first. I was considering not making him show up at all, but in the end, he and Tonks just had to meet, if only so that the uncertainty of their relationship will be shown, and to give their presents. As to what they gave each other, aside from random ideas about knitwear and books and Sneakoscopes, I honestly had nothing specific in mind. The gift-giving was more of Tonks reminding Remus of what she can and wants to give him, in the hope that he'll come back, and of Remus being unable to definitively (at that time, and only to himself) end it with Tonks.
Okay, that last part doesn't really make sense. Haha.
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