The Killing Lights

[eltea]

Title: The Killing Lights
Author: eltea
Rating & Warnings: PG-13; minor character death
Prompts: Day of Neglect, Fireworks, Drama/Romance, Location #11
Word Count: 9488
Summary: Based on AFI’s song of the same name - When a wave of mysterious murders sweeps through London, Remus Lupin must set aside his personal problems and help Nymphadora Tonks to

Comments

[gilpin25]

I enjoyed this tremendously. Both the mystery and the slowly developing relationship between Remus and Tonks are very well done and always kept me guessing what was going to happen next. You've got some lovely descriptions and lines in here, and you'd obviously put a lot of thought into using all the prompts, particularly the location one of a man/Remus stood mulling so many things over, which has really paid off.

Can't quite believe it's your first serious fan fic as this is so well done. Hope it's the first of many. :)

[eltea]

Thank you so much; I'm really glad you liked it. =) It was a huge amount of fun to write; I love the challenge of trying to work specific things (such as prompts) into writing. =D And I have written a lot of original fiction, I just haven't had much experience with fanfic, except for a couple of very short, silly stories written when I was bored (hence this being my first "serious" attempt). It was a little nerve-wracking to be writing characters that weren't mine and that I therefore had to attempt to get in character, but it was fun, and I've really loved getting to share it for people to read. =)

[shimotsuki]

This is your first fanfiction? Then I really hope you keep writing, because I thought this was fantastic -- the way the focus of the story alternated between the relationship and the murder plot, with each thread developing smoothly and plausibly, and also the perceptive characterization. And you've got a lovely way of putting words together. (I was also amused by Umbridge actually contributing to something useful for a change, heh.) I hope to be able to read more of your work soon!

[eltea]

Not my first ever, just the first meant to be taken seriously - I've written a couple of very silly ones, though never with these characters. ;) Thank you so much for your comments; they mean a lot to me. I had a lot of fun writing this, and I'm really glad you enjoyed it. =)

[jncar]

You made lots of wonderfully original choices in this story which were very enjoyable. The mystery was well-thought-out and fit very well in with the HP world. And the romantic tension throughout was very nice.

Excellent for a first fic!

[eltea]

Thank you! =) I'm glad you liked the romantic tension; I'm not usually much of a romance writer (my original fiction tends to lean more towards mystery). It was a lot of fun to write, and I'm glad to have been able to share it with people to read. =)

[mrstater]

Wow! Like everyone else I have to register my astonishment that this is your first serious fanfic. Mystery may just be the most difficult genre to tackle, and you've done it splendidly as well as done really fantastic characterization as well.

Your prose sucked me right in from the get-go, and I completely forgot what was going on around me. I'm really impressed how you pitched the emotional arc against the background; I always love the idea of Remus and Tonks really coming together and seeing how they fit as a couple while doing a job together.

Your command of the wizarding world is really outstanding, too, encompassing both the whimsical and the harrowing.

Ten minutes later, when Fred and George Weasley arrive, they are confronted by an Auror, two of their former teachers, a woman who snubbed the Black family and lived, and a mother who, after the death of her husband, singlehandedly raised a werewolf.

Two strong young men under the control of an extremely powerful Dark Wizard don’t stand a chance.I loved that bit. Nice

[eltea]

Thank you so much. =) Mystery is actually the genre in which I write most of my original fiction, so I felt safest with that, but - having only ever tried a couple of short, silly fanfics and nothing serious - I was very worried about the characterizations; that's not something I usually have to think about because I'm usually writing my own characters.

I spent a lot of time on Harry Potter Lexicon, Wikipedia, and other information sources in general - I wanted to make every detail correct, so I even ended up checking facts that I doubt anybody would ever notice. XD It was fun, though - I'm really looking forward to writing another fic, and I'm really glad you enjoyed this one. =)

[calyndra]

Wow, I didn't expect it to be Fred and George! Nice twist.

I loved Andromeda randomly being at Blythe Lupin's house for tea. I also enjoyed (can't believe I'm saying that) Umbridge's involvement, although I'm glad she got hers in the last paragraph. That seems a fitting neo-Marauder Fred and George thing to do. I can just picture those kittens. :)

Thanks. :)

[eltea]

Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. =)