Comments | merthin: Brigit's Flame August 2011 Second entry: Great Britain in 2067

merthin

Brigit's Flame August 2011 Second entry: Great Britain in 2067

Aug 14, 2011 15:24

"You can't do it, Tom! You'll get caught ( Read more... )

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keppiehed August 14 2011, 23:46:04 UTC

*laughs* This was very clever! I appreciate the difficulty involved in writing a dialogue-only story, and you did it beautifully. Interesting the whole way through. I love it!

rubyelf August 15 2011, 22:30:30 UTC

Big Brother indeed... things seem to have become increasingly difficult for good old-fashioned criminals!

greenwillow27 August 18 2011, 06:12:30 UTC

Aw, poor fledgling criminal defeated by technology before he even gets his plan off the ground. Funny-- and I guess it sort of supports the notion than criminals aren't really all that bright. ;o)

backlink building service anonymous August 18 2011, 17:06:23 UTC

Thought I would comment and say neat theme, did you make it for yourself? It's really awesome!

one_time_pad August 23 2011, 00:00:22 UTC

This was interestingly done. I love me some dystopia, and sci-fi, and biological modifications. I think you have all the right elements here for something really good- I think, though, that doing more than dialogue might have been a necessity for all you were trying to convey, if that makes sense? Show, rather than tell. Good job with this, though; I'm looking forward to seeing more. :-)