Brigit's Flame August 2011 First entry: The streaks of cerise...

[merthin]

The streaks of cerise in the evening sky made him feel hungry. Standing in the shadow of the high-pillars of his once-proud mansion, Vastell gazed out over the beach to the ocean. Soon it would be night, full-dark without even a sliver-moon to light the way. He liked this time of month. It meant easy hunting with easily confused and scared prey. He

Comments

[keppiehed]

Oooh! This was very visceral. You gave me a thrill. I want to know more!

[merthin]

I'm glad you liked it. Vastell is an MC of mine I like to pull out from time to time, especially when I'm feeling... aggressive. ;-)

If you're truly interested to learn more of his origins, you should be able to find one more public entry under the tag "Vastell".

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. :-)

[merthin]

I'm glad you enjoyed that part. :-) As to it being a good thing, I can't say. It probably depends on how much you write or think about blood-sucking/blood-drinking beasties. ;-)

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It is appreciated.

[merthin]

:-)

roar time

[bardiphouka]

I am sorry, vampires seem to have become so,so human these days. Nice to read about one that actually skulks. Like how one simple word can bring back the old days.

Re: roar time

[merthin]

I'm glad you found a good memory in this short piece. - I agree, vampires have become very human, especially within the last few years. Vastell does have his human side, but at the moment, he's all monster. ;-)

Thank you for reading and commenting.

[writteninsight]

Very nicely done! Your descriptions of blood are suitably chilling, and your character's personality comes through quite clearly in very few words. I also went back and read the other Vastell entry - you've made tremendous strides as a writer since then! :)

[merthin]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I also wish to extend a special thank you for going back and reading that rather badly written introduction to Vastell. That was quite some time ago, now. And thank you; I guess I have gotten a little better since then. A friend of mine is so much better than I, but she will on occasion stoop to help me.