Brigits Flame Entry for July 2009, Week 1: Wings

[merthin]

A ghastly flutter,
Leather strokes darkening skies,
Virgin breathes her last.

Comments

[desert_rose]

I've always loved haiku poetry, and have a lot of respect for writers who can produce such beautiful pieces of writing like this one!

A lovely take on the topic!

[merthin]

You are far too kind, but thank you, none-the-less. :-)

[desert_rose]

Seriously, your poem is very very good!! You should be proud of it!

[ephemeralbreath]

Creepy.... Not something I usually feel for haiku. Haha.

[merthin]

*grin* Thank you. As I understand it, a classical haiku is supposed to mention something about nature in the last line, usually a seasonal reference. I'm not sure this could be considered classical haiku, though there are few things more natural than death. Of course, this particular method may be somewhat UNusual. --- Thanks for reading and commenting.

[innana88]

It is a challenge to make a haiku vivid and complete in so few syllables. You've definitely done that here. Well done!

[merthin]

Thank you for reading and for the kind words.

[drippedonpaper]

So much fear, dread and sadness wrapped up in so few words.

Great job!

[merthin]

Thank you. I had few words with which to work. ;-)