"I do humbly beg an audience with the mighty and powerful King Ramesses, our God made flesh. May he see fit to help us in our time of need
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Wow! You went Really Old School with that one!! I enjoyed this, but forgive me, at the end was Cavius trying to kill the King or did the King stab Cavius? Either way it was a dramatic twist. It seemed as a child the King had insight for juding character. Had he seen something truly bad with Cavius?
Wow. Thanks for reading and leaving such a nice comment. - Cavius was trying to kill the king. Unfortunately, I had a nasty case of writer's block for that week and was down to the wire when I "finished" this piece, thus, a bit of explanation got left out.
The lesson from the old king was that if someone truly accepted responsibility for a failure that they could probably be trusted. Cavius blamed everyone but himself. When that happened, the young king suspected that the rumors (completely left out of the story) of Cavius' indiscretions were true. He had suspected before and dressed accordingly (armor under his robes). At the last, the king actually did doubt Cavius' guilt but Cavius proved his treachery by attempting to kill the king.
Thank you again for reading. I apologize that it wasn't more coherent.
I really like that the ending was connected to the King's "listening" for the hints of a person's character. Thanks for the info, I completely understand now, and probably all you need are just a few sentences. The story is great! Oh...you're welcome. I'd love to read more.
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I enjoyed this, but forgive me, at the end was Cavius trying to kill the King or did the King stab Cavius?
Either way it was a dramatic twist. It seemed as a child the King had insight for juding character. Had he seen something truly bad with Cavius?
::off to read more of your stuff::
:-)
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The lesson from the old king was that if someone truly accepted responsibility for a failure that they could probably be trusted. Cavius blamed everyone but himself. When that happened, the young king suspected that the rumors (completely left out of the story) of Cavius' indiscretions were true. He had suspected before and dressed accordingly (armor under his robes). At the last, the king actually did doubt Cavius' guilt but Cavius proved his treachery by attempting to kill the king.
Thank you again for reading. I apologize that it wasn't more coherent.
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Oh...you're welcome.
I'd love to read more.
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