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Fiction by Brenna: Judgment

Jun 28, 2010 10:35

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maggie_writes June 28 2010, 19:50:16 UTC

Wow, you're really good at scary. Is THE REPLACEMENT this scary? I'll try not to read it at night.

brennayovanoff June 30 2010, 16:25:03 UTC

You know, *I* would not say THE REPLACEMENT is scary . . . but then they told me they were marketing it as horror, so I might not be the best judge.

I'd say it's eerie and atmospheric and a teeny tiny bit surreal? But then, that's what I thought when I was writing this :D

iamba_si June 28 2010, 22:03:00 UTC

Oh, dear. I'm feeling rather dull at the moment. What was *her* secret? My head is swimming with images of Grady pouring lemonade, teaching a young girl how to kill, and with the ghost of Ashley Palmiter--wondering how these things are linked, or which of them are not connected, and what Clemmie's secret really is.

I loved how atmospheric this was. :)

brennayovanoff June 30 2010, 16:27:57 UTC

I honestly think her secret is kind of open to interpretation. The simplest version, in my mind, would be her having a close friendship with a serial killer and being the only person who knew what he was, when everyone in the state was scrambling around trying to catch him.

iamba_si July 1 2010, 05:14:06 UTC

OK! That is the first interpretation I had. However, I was rather thrown off by Clemmie's repeated descriptions of serial killer psychology. I figured, Hey, her dad's a prison guard, so of course she's up on that sort of thing. But I kept getting this itching, creepy feeling that she was speaking from her own experience. I kept imagining a serial killer behind her eyes. Then, with the dead girl wandering around, I wondered, Victim?

Ah, so many possibilities. Very nice.

Thank you! :)

melenka June 29 2010, 01:09:30 UTC

The hallway stretched out behind him, fluorescent. Forever.

I saw this. The rest of the setting was visible, but I saw this.

I think the most chilling part was the last line. The whole thing was both numb and full of creepitude, but being alone with your secrets forever seems worse than confessing and moving on.

Did I mention I like this? That's not the right word, of course, but it's all I can come up with right now.

brennayovanoff June 30 2010, 16:31:40 UTC

being alone with your secrets forever seems worse than confessing and moving on

That is *exactly* what got me started on this one-I was just thinking, "how horrible."

And the line about the hallway is shamefully borrowed from the hallways of my own high school, which were hideously depressing, but very, very bright.

laurafey June 29 2010, 06:38:48 UTC

This was amazing! You really caught me! I'm not as easily creeped out as others but the whle setting, the whole story had a chilly feel to it. I loved it!
And I like the glint of the relationship between Clemmie and Carl Grady. That guy telling a teenage girl how he likes to kill and her being completely comfortable with that: awesome.

brennayovanoff June 30 2010, 16:35:41 UTC

I'm like you-I get a weird, happy feeling from things that are creepy, so technically I guess I don't find them creepy, but I will admit, I *am* creeped out by rain. I know, that's really weird.

apocalypticbob June 29 2010, 06:46:30 UTC

Once again, you've managed to creep me completely out! I should know better than to read your writing right before I go to bed!

brennayovanoff June 30 2010, 16:44:09 UTC

I make a bad bedtime-story teller-and I have lots of little cousins who can attest to it :D