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Fiction by Brenna: Neighbors

Mar 29, 2010 12:16

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tessagratton March 29 2010, 18:38:12 UTC

Win! The one of her brother makes me feel weirdly sad, like seeing a helium balloon tied to a railing somewhere, and knowing that no one's coming back for it. Especially.

apocalypticbob March 29 2010, 18:53:02 UTC

YES!!! This is the line that smacked me in the face, too!! Brilliant!!

brennayovanoff March 30 2010, 15:31:29 UTC

I think I might have stolen that image from the movie The Red Balloon, but I'm not sure, because in my head, the balloon in the line is yellow :D

apocalypticbob March 29 2010, 18:56:20 UTC

Oh, Brenna. So sad. So sad.

You do sad better than anyone I know, but it never (or at least ultra-rarely) crosses into emo territory, and that's a gift. Another haunting tale.

brennayovanoff March 30 2010, 15:34:22 UTC

:D I try to tread lightly, but I definitely tread that emo line, and I have *no* idea why. Real-life me is kind of the opposite!

Tanita Says :) anonymous March 29 2010, 19:35:02 UTC

*sob*
What perfect symmetry. Both sides of the fence match up perfectly -- despite the differences in the yards, the emptiness on both sides is the same.

Beautiful -- even though it's kind of killing me.

Re: Tanita Says :) brennayovanoff March 30 2010, 15:36:55 UTC

Thanks! I love symmetry, and recursive patterns, and Merry Fates is the perfect place to play with that, because I don't have to sustain it for a whole novel :)

elegantsnobbery March 29 2010, 19:42:41 UTC

Ohhhhh... Brenna, I'm just going to go ahead and say it: This made my eyes prickle and my nose sting. I hate crying, but this story was so beautifully written and so very sad that when I was done reading, I scrolled back to the top and read it straight through again. Loved it even more the second time. Will probably love it even more the third time.

*off to read again*

elegantsnobbery March 29 2010, 19:47:05 UTC

Yep. Loved it even more the third time.

brennayovanoff March 30 2010, 15:42:37 UTC

Oh, I hate crying too! But I love making other people cry. (but only in writing--I promise!)

maggie_writes March 29 2010, 19:47:53 UTC

Wow this is amazing! So many beautiful images, especially the helium balloon and the lawn like a green sea. I love your writing!

brennayovanoff March 30 2010, 15:46:17 UTC

I'm glad you liked it! I love writing voices where I can play around with images.