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Fiction by Tessa: "Stains"

Feb 08, 2010 11:39

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unicorns, clockwork tower, magic, fiction by tessa

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Tanita Says :) anonymous February 8 2010, 18:11:29 UTC

A story we all know: a parent loves a child, right? And yet, it's not so familiar - the adult loves the child and promises them that love, and then, sometimes, maturity robs the child of what the parent loved, and all that is left is suspicion and fear

And the symbolism of the unicorn... led away with silver chains by black-lipped young adults... innocence being taken away, when one's words have power... One's deeds have power in the adult world, too, and it is deeds, in this case, and not words, that count.

Innocence is lost in such a number of ways.
What an excellent story.

Re: Tanita Says :) tessagratton February 8 2010, 18:15:08 UTC

This is the best comment ever. I'm so glad the story made sense! LOL. Thank you.

brennayovanoff February 8 2010, 18:33:56 UTC

Sweet! (perhaps the most inadequate comment EVER)

tessagratton February 8 2010, 18:36:14 UTC

Hahaha. Well, it balances out the one above. ;)

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tessagratton February 8 2010, 19:33:14 UTC

Hee hee, that is absolutely allowed - and encouraged. ;)

london_setterby February 8 2010, 19:42:42 UTC

Wow... I love the imagery and the character development here. This is probably my favorite Merry Fates story so far (which is saying something :) ). I wasn't sure about the swapped structure of the last two scenes at first, but the more I think about it, the more I like it. The analogies between Ginny and the unicorn are fascinating, and the swapped scenes at the end really adds to that. Stealing their innocence back from her parents... or taking away Ginny's innocence... either way, really interesting.
& I have to add that I have so much love for the descriptions of the indoor forest. Oh my. Gorgeous and unusual. I could re-read that scene about a dozen more times.

tessagratton February 8 2010, 19:47:56 UTC

Wow, thanks. I was experimenting with timeline here (as you noticed) in order to play with... I guess the fluid nature of growing up... and went back and forth about the end myself. Glad it didn't ruin the story for you.

I have *always* wanted infinite money to built my own wizard's tower. I would have a room like that for sure.

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tessagratton February 8 2010, 20:37:12 UTC

Aww.

It might always be a short story world, though. :)