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Monday Fiction by Brenna: Green Queen

Feb 02, 2009 11:27

I typed the first sentence of my conclusion and touched my bottom lip. The snake-bite studs felt cold and smooth. Almost too rad to stand. Jessica Butcher was going to die from jealousy, and that made me smile. Then the cursor stopped blinking ( Read more... )

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Comments 22

tessagratton February 2 2009, 18:45:52 UTC

Nice!

(I'm also totally jealous that you're done. I can't believe how much I dislike frogs and golden balls and princesses and stories that are dumb.)

How many stories in a row do you think you can end with a kiss? I think you should challenge yourself. ;)

brennayovanoff February 2 2009, 19:00:00 UTC

(I'm also totally jealous that you're done. I can't believe how much I dislike frogs and golden balls and princesses and stories that are dumb.)

Haha--I get to laugh at you now (then you can show me just what's up when Wednesday rolls around). Seriously, I started writing, and then realized I could think of very few ways to spin this. Also, I hate princesses.

It's funny, it occurred to me as I was posting that I hardly ever write kissing stories, ever, but somehow this is my second in a row, bring my total up to . . . three? But this is like, a better kiss. That last one was just gross.

tessagratton February 2 2009, 19:02:35 UTC

then realized I could think of very few ways to spin this. Exactly. And I don't like it enough to do what I did with Snow White or something similar. Boo.

Your best kiss was in your selkie story. For REAL.

brennayovanoff February 2 2009, 19:07:31 UTC

Your best kiss was in your selkie story. For REAL.

Awww :) (That was the third one I could think of. All build-up, baby!)

bleuberi21 February 2 2009, 19:16:09 UTC

Awww, that was so sweet!

brennayovanoff February 3 2009, 01:32:07 UTC

Awww, thank you! :D

serafina_zane February 2 2009, 22:44:23 UTC

The last dance I went to (8th grade formal, I was forced) I ended up going with a black-and-white dress that wouldn't clash with cherry/fire engine colored hair.

Haha, hot boys in neon who smell like Cheetos and laundry. I know...kind of a lot of those.

brennayovanoff February 3 2009, 02:00:05 UTC

Red/black/white is a great color-scheme (I'm an impassioned advocate of color-schemes)!

One of the ways I entertained myself in school was by making up corollaries, and I had one that said, basically, the more attractive a boy is (stylish-wise), the more likely he is to have unfortunate breath. I realize this is not scientific, and I don't want to go around casting aspersions on stylish boys, but in my personal experience it often proves out.

apocalypticbob February 2 2009, 23:32:39 UTC

You know, I like it. Because I didn't want to like her, and I still don't like her, but I think she's okay somewhere down inside, underneath the teenage angst and neon hair colors. And I think she'll turn out okay, like she'll grow into a decent human being that isn't all hormones and self concern. She reminds me of a whole lot of the kids I teach...you captured modern teenager very well.

brennayovanoff February 3 2009, 01:53:24 UTC

Honestly, I started out pretty much hating this character. (Which might explain why she occasionally seems to be parodying of herself.)

I always have a hard time writing princesses, because imperiousness is such an unattractive quality in a person, but after I knocked around with this one awhile, it started to seem like any imperiousness was really just insecurity and the need for self-assertion, and it keeps getting in the way of her good aspects. So, I've forgiven her. :) I really do think she's a fundamentally decent person who just hasn't come up with a foolproof way to express it yet.

sherwood21 February 3 2009, 07:15:57 UTC

*points up* This. :)

simonhay_healer February 3 2009, 09:24:47 UTC

So many good comments and chatting here. I'm tired today, so I'll only stay for one cup of tea. I love the kiss. I'm not one for princesses, but this one has potential. I feel cheated, I never had this teenage feeling. One day lets do lunch. Ponders plane fare. Cheers Simon.

brennayovanoff February 4 2009, 16:48:07 UTC

I feel cheated, I never had this teenage feeling.

I arrived late to the public school party, so I suspect I missed a lot of the standard teenage stuff too. But then, that's probably why it fascinates me so much :D