Decay

[mercury_rose]

She clings to the realities that she still feels within every inch of her body. The image of the Dark Lord, immortal in her eyes, burns bright underneath her eyelids as she dreams. She holds on to her faith with everything that she has.

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It is so hard, the colors in her image of the Dark Lord are becoming steadily less vivid. The red of

Comments

[miababy04]

Great story!!!

[mercury_rose]

Thanks!

[chairs]

Oh wow, that was just stunning. I loved the progression of it, how you eventually abandoned capitals and punctuation - a perfect illustration of Bella's descent into madness. Well done! I'll be saving this to my bookmarks.

[mercury_rose]

Wow, thanks :) I wasn't really sure how well the style worked, so I'm glad you liked it!

[vivianedanglars]

Beautiful. I think it's strong because it's very simple... what happens to a woman in such a condition - "worse than anything that she ever inflicted", I so agree.

[mercury_rose]

Thank you!

[secretsolitaire]

Very creative. :-)

[mercury_rose]

Thanks for reviewing :)

[l3petitemort]

this is really intriguing. i like how the structure mirrors bella's disintegration, eventually just becoming fragments.

[mercury_rose]

Thank you, and I'm glad that the structure worked for you! It's definitely something new for me (the mingling of narrative and verse), but I love to experiment with different styles, especially in fanfic.