Kryptonite | Chapter 11

[mercury_pheonix]

Title: Kryptonite
Rating: R - Strong mentions of sex, suicide, rape and abuse.
Characters/Pairings: Jack/Ianto, Gwen/Rhys, Martha, Rhiannon, others may crop up as well.
Spoilers: Set after Exit Wounds, mentions of Doctor Who Series 3 finale.
Summary: After 2,000 years buried beneath Cardiff, Jack's mind is crumbling. Ianto will do anything to avoid

Comments

[mrs_depp009]

Just caught up with the whole series, i've been in tears the whole way through, its so emotional but fantastic at the same time.
Really would love to read more
Thanks
xxxx

[mercury_pheonix]

I'm sorry that you cried, but very glad and humbled I was able to have such an effect on you.

Thank you! You shall read more!

[candi_apple_red]

Leaving comment! See??
Please fix? *hugs Percy the plush platypus*

[mercury_pheonix]

I will try my best, but I cannot fix it until the fic itself decides its time. I've given up and am now letting it drag me wherever it wants to go.

Thank you for the comment! This fishing thing works, I should lose my shame and do it more often.

[chamilet]

I pressed comment and nothing happened...well, this box showed up that I'm typing into...but no continuation of the cliffhanger so evilly left...

[mercury_pheonix]

Aww, I'm sorry about that. LJ doesn't want the cliffie to be resolved yet - bad LJ keeping these people waiting!

[mscatmoon]

Oh, that's just not good... This last scene really brought into focus how badly Jack is doing. I'm feeling a bit nervous and disoriented myself so I can imagine how his team is feeling because there's just something about Jack Harkness not be the steady, capable hero he always is that seriously messes with the stability of the universe. ;)

(addressing certin creator peoples...) See? You can break Jack without having to kill his lover, and destroy his family and everything else he has. But then most of US knew that already.

[mercury_pheonix]

Breaking Jack is so much more interesting when the people around him are affected (rather then being dead in order to break him). Without Jack, Ianto and Gwen are being brought close to breaking themselves, and this, I think, is much more dramatically interesting than killing them and allowing Jack to break on his own.

I tried to highlight howe changed and broken Jack is with the last paragraph - I wanted it to be just in character enough to be recognisable, but different enough so that its disorientating and frightening. It took me such a long time to get the courage to write the last scene, and I'm SO glad it worked the way I wanted it to.

Thank you!

[firefly124]

Wow. This chapter absolutely made me cry. They're all so broken, and Rhys looks like the only one really holding it together. Even Martha's a bit ragged. *squishes them all*

[mercury_pheonix]

My brain was screaming at me, going "NOT ENOUGH RHYS!" so there will definitely be more him. In the circumstances, he provides the ultimate outsider view, which means he'll probably be the most helpful - sometimes, the simplest solutions are the best.

That's what good drama is. It breaks our characters into little pieces, explores how this affects them and their relationships with each other, and then slowly builds them back together again.

Thank you.

[firefly124]

That's what good drama is. It breaks our characters into little pieces, explores how this affects them and their relationships with each other, and then slowly builds them back together again.

Yes. Too bad *some* writers seem to forget the putting them back together part.

[mercury_pheonix]

You have no idea how hard I had to work to refrain from actually saying that in my previous post.