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[ OKHC ] Reaching for Moonlight - Oneshot

Nov 10, 2006 15:37

Title: Reaching for Moonlight
Rating: R
Pairing: Hikaru x Kaoru, Kyouya x Kaoru, and slight Hikaru x Haruhi
Warnings: Incest, Hikaru’s dirty mouth, angst, sex.
Word Count: 5889.
Summary: Kaoru pushed Hikaru away only to have him come right back.
Author’s Notes: So I jumped on the not-as-cracktastic Kyouya x Kaoru side-pairing bandwagon. On a side ( Read more... )

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Comments 17

hookandeye January 1 2007, 23:07:36 UTC

I know i comment on your other story but i just have to write something here too! These are so great! The prose is clean and easy to follow, never getting clogged up with over description or metaphore. The sex is sensual and dark and hot. The emotions of the characters are BELIVABLE!
Magnificent writing!

mercurial_flux January 1 2007, 23:38:11 UTC

Thank you again!

Yeah, I usually have issues with toning down the massive amounts of description. I'm glad it wasn't too much. Thanks for your review!

the gold ive bin panning for anonymous January 2 2007, 00:17:13 UTC

woaw i commend u-- first good fic ive read in a long time

Re: the gold ive bin panning for mercurial_flux January 2 2007, 00:21:24 UTC

Thank you. :)

arid_hugs January 2 2007, 05:24:22 UTC

Your writing is just SO gorgeous! I could definitely see events unfolding as I was reading, you're great with realistic plots.

mercurial_flux January 2 2007, 05:30:14 UTC

Thank you very much! I had hoped the plot wasn't too shallow.

That is SO much icon love, by the way. Yay for twincestuous punishment games~

aspenfallen January 6 2007, 02:41:57 UTC

This was beautifully written from top to bottom, I have to say. I have to agree with what other people have already said-it's believable, there's good diction, and everything flows well. When I started reading this, I thought because of the plot that the scenes would be awkward, yet some how you managed to craft the story in a way to make it not be that way at all, so I'm extremely impressed. Thanks for this, and please continue writing more Hitachiincestsmut<3!

mercurial_flux January 6 2007, 03:05:39 UTC

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it and thanks for the review!

kuririnchan January 18 2007, 04:21:17 UTC

This is fantastic! There are seriously no words for it.

mercurial_flux January 18 2007, 04:22:52 UTC

Thanks a lot!