jack/claire

[meanwhile_84]

jack/claire
R?
appx 450 words
pwp
early to mid season 2ish?
you know who I've never let jack be with? the island's resident petite australian
thought it would be fun to try

Comments

[eponine119]

There are some gorgeous descriptions in this. You also create a really nice sense of atmosphere -- the pool, the way it is between them.

[meanwhile_84]

Thank you. :)

[gottalovev]

wow, I really liked this. I love how you picture Claire, quite far from her usual angelic behavior. She is beautiful and they would look great together (if it was not from the possibly related factor)

[meanwhile_84]

Ha! I'm kinda partial to the Jack and Claire are related theory, so it DID make this a little weird to write. But I'm always a fan of either of them doing something sneaky and naughty...what better way than together. :)

[gemjam]

I really liked this, the mood, the setting, very effective. I loved that touch of realism that she doesn't come when he does, that worked really well. This isn't fairytale sex, it's not erotica, it's real, and you got that across really nicely with that detail. Sex isn't always this perfect thing were you both come together and every move is right, and that's a side to the act that you don't often see in writing, for obvious reasons, we do deal in fantasy after all, but I really liked how you wrote it here without taking anything away from what the two of them have.

Very nicely done :)

[meanwhile_84]

I DO think sometimes it's good to give sex writing a shot of realism, especially het. Maybe men almost always come, but women don't, and that doesn't have to mean it's the end of the world.

Thanks so much. I was going for atmosphere, so I'm glad to hear it worked. ♥