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[meaghie_poison]

crot narrative

it's huge, but i need some feedback. i've never tried something like this.

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[yellow_boots]

i love it! it was a little confusing at first, jumping from the different perspectives of the different characters, but i got the hang of it about a third of the way through it, and yaaaa i like it a lot :D

[anonymous]

punk couple = pretty fabulous, and i love what you do with laurie in the beginning, but it needs more teeth throughout, or maybe more on the way back when to make the teeth sharper.

your language is close to flawless, as usual :)

also, outsiders/people that didn't read what this is about wouldn't get it, and probably wouldn't make the connection with the court case, so you gotta do a little extra with that as well.

[anonymous]

i definitely did not post that at 5:47 am....

[meaghie_poison]

thanks so much!!