Babylon

[mcgarrygirl78]

PLEASE DONT POST IN THE bau_inbox. THANKS : )

OK guys, you know I'm writing an AU where Emily's in a rock band and she's being stalked. Well its called Babylon, after the name of Emily's band. I decided to post a piece, since I'm 15,000 words in and almost 40 pages. Its killing me cuz I have to make it a case fic but its also one I'm working hard on and

Comments

[staay_classy]

This was awesome! I love bold (not sure if it's the right word) Emily! I do love your writing and I am looking forward to reading more :)

[mcgarrygirl78]

Ooh yay, I'm so glad you liked it. I am working hard on it, hoping to finish it up in the next week or so. Case fic is my nemesis but I'm doing my best.

Thanks for reading and leaving me some feedback : )

[staay_classy]

I did, I really did. I love badass Emily, specially when Hotch is around so I have a feeling that I really am going to love this :)

I suck at leaving feedback but it definitely was my pleasure !

[mcgarrygirl78]

I have to be honest and tell you this might not end up being Hotch/Prentiss. But I'm still loving writing it and I'm still confident that its going to be a good story.

[ext_552645]

I love this. But it's you, it's Emily, it's rock and roll -- how could I not love it? ;)

It's wonderful how she's just telling everyone what to do here.

As much as I can ship Emily hard with other men (Ian, Morgan, the odd detective or unsub, and Sam in your stories), the moment(s) between Hotch and Emily always blow everything else out of the water. :P

Great glimpse, can't wait for the full picture.

[mcgarrygirl78]

They did me proud in this scene. Sometimes Hotch is difficult, at best to work with, but he did OK here. I love the Emily I'm writing in this story, she's giving me good things and good feelings. She's clearly the leader of the band but she's a team player too.

H/P moments are always my favorite too. I hope to have a few more before I wrap this up. I've written so much but this is the only one I have so far so I had to post it to give people an idea what it was about but to also give them what they want, you know?

[ext_552645]

Well, this is what we want. :)

I like that Ashley is in this. I want her back so she can be Emily's pal. Because JJ ... meh, you know.

[mcgarrygirl78]

Yeah, Seaver had serious potential to grow, and I dont like that they didnt keep her at least on a recurring basis...I loved the rookie. Rachel Nichols just walked into a bad situation, none of that was her fault, they could've all worked in harmony and it would've kicked ass.

I love JJ in my mind, and actually missed her when she was gone but I think that's just cuz Season 6 was so epically bad. If it would've kicked ass I dont think her not being there would've been so glaring.

I know Hotch and Prentiss is what people want, believe me I do. I want them most of the time as well. And even if this doesnt turn out to be a love story for them I know they've got a few good scenes they can give me and then I can give them to you guys : )

[secondheartbeat]

This is not the Emily we've seen before. This is kind of tweaky rockstar Emily for sure. I caught a few typos, but you weren't asking about those. It's good to see Hotch get to be Hotch, uptight as all hell.

Seaver in bed with Emily was a sure twist. Maybe that will get some people's attention.

I think it will be good to stretch yourself and do a casefic. Casefic may be all we have left if Season 7 sucks ass.

[mcgarrygirl78]

I wasnt exactly going for 'tweaky' rock star but...I like that : ) She's just doing her thing and she's doing it her way and that's the end of the story. Yeah, Seaver was a twist. Like Jason, I wasnt really expecting her to be there either.

Hotch is soooooo Hotch in this, seriously. And I love it!

I caught those typos as I was going through too. This is one of the reasons I need a beta reader, you cant see them anymore after awhile cuz your brain just corrects them as soon as your eyes sees them.

Case fic is soooo hard for me but I'm trying. I know what I want and how I want it, I just have to make it plausible from brain to page. I cant promise that, but I can promise I'm damn sure gonna try.

And I have all my fingers and toes crossed for Season 7. Dude, it doesnt have to be epic, just be better than Seasons 5 and 6. Damn, that's not even that hard. Erica Messer better make my semi-crush on her worth it.

[citymusings]

WOW! That's really good. I enjoyed it very much.

One typo stood out to me, “There's nothing sexy about Ms. Prentiss, believe me.” I'm pretty sure there are many sexy things about Ms. Prentiss. ;) I'm guessing there's a word missing and then it's a direct address.

I really liked your characterizations. (Morgan ♥ Sorry, I'm on a big of a I-love-and-miss-Morgan kick right now)

[mcgarrygirl78]

Yeah, that was one of the mistakes. I found a bunch of them, which is one reason I want a beta for this one. I also know its gonna be big cuz I'm trying to get all the stories in...I'm doin Jason's right now.

I'm glad you lked it, and I dont know if you heard but Sam finally gets the girl in this one : )

Hope there will be more Morgan for you to enjoy. I miss all the characters...I'm so hopeful Season 7 gives me something to enjoy.

[citymusings]

I hope you find a really great beta. Have fun fitting everyone's story.

Yay Sam! (how did I manage to not read this paragraph the first time?) I hope he enjoys it. Em's a lucky girl.

We're less than a month away from S7, so I look forward to seeing them all again (hopefully in better form than S6). I'm not sure why I missed Morgan in particular today. He's not my favorite, I just miss him ATM. It was probably the Twitter vids that got to me.