I'm not completely happy with this--it's a bit lopsided and there's some definite mood whiplash that I'm not sure what to do about, but the stupid sticky keys are driving me crazy, so this is probably as good as it's going to get for now.
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Simple.
Hm, do I smell a sequel? Or maybe waffles? :P
Really liked how Dean talked about the Impala, even if he was laying it a little bit thick at the end, just to screw with Jack's head.
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And yes, Dean + Impala = OTP. :)
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I think I was thrown off because the chapter started out so light, with Jack happy, making waffles, glad to have something to do and someone he respects to do it with. And then I switched to Dean's perspective and suddenly the light feeling was gone. I guess it took me a little while to figure out that Dean was feeling out of sorts. :) Looking back on it now, it does seem coherent. I was just startled, I guess.
It does make sense now, though. I mean, Jack is used to being on military units, working with people he barely knows, getting things done through discipline and a chain of command. Dean has only ever worked with two people, the most important people in his life. Of course the idea of working with someone else, forming a new sort of partnership, totally freaks him out. And he also gets a little freaked by the fact that Jack is looking at HIM for what to do, not giving the orders. Dean has never experienced anything like it.
I think he'll get used to it, though.
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The first half was really easy to write--just rolled right out. The second half took a lot more effort, and I couldn't figure out what to do with the last bit. Then it took that little turn, with Dean going all hurty and thinking about his family, and I wasn't expecting it at all. But once I let it come, it pretty much wrote itself.
I guess this is sort of a good thing, though. I'm not so much controlling the narrative as letting the characters do what they want. Maybe that's better?
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And one of the benefits of fanfic is that you're allowed to ramble on, let the characters just explore, instead of always serving a plot the way good original fic should.
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