Comments | maxism12: [FanFic] Broken Perfection

maxism12

[FanFic] Broken Perfection

Feb 17, 2011 17:04

Pairing: Siwon/Sungmin, Siwon/Heechul (kpop_prompts : 045 mask)
Rating: PG 15
Genre: Romance // Angst // Workforce!AU // (slight, barely there) Smut!
Summary: He doesn't deserve it; but he needs it.

( His heart breaks each time, but it doesn't hurt anymore. )

genre:au, pairing:siwon/sungmin, !challenge, genre:smut, genre:romance, !fanfiction, rating:pg15, genre:angst, pairing:siwon/heechul, #fandom:super junior

Comments 30

addictivemonkey February 17 2011, 21:58:47 UTC

THAT was really good! omo~~ poor Sungmin. I love Siwon but... WTF?! Siwon, are you an idiot? Doing something like this to SUNGMIN? /kicks his ass
SiMin <3

maxism12 February 18 2011, 19:36:29 UTC

SiMin forever.

Thanks for the comment♥

kpopsinger501 February 17 2011, 23:36:38 UTC

T_T poor Sungmin!!! How could siwon cheat on such a cute and adorably nice person? Well actually heechul is sexy... But still!!!!!!

maxism12 February 18 2011, 19:34:52 UTC

Heechul is the hottest slut known to mankind.

Thank you for the comment. ♥

lovetails February 18 2011, 16:58:05 UTC

gimme a bucket and let me fill it with my tears =(

maxism12 February 18 2011, 19:32:49 UTC

/sobs No, I shall not.

lovetails February 19 2011, 04:53:59 UTC

ok so in what manner u suggest i cry? *sniffles*

maxism12 February 19 2011, 12:13:50 UTC

Don't cry. /sniffles Siwon is a basterd.

still_doll_15 February 20 2011, 05:25:30 UTC

as much as I love SiChul office smut though not as much as HanChul anywhere and anykind smut because I am forever HanChul biased, I'd like to pry Heechul away from Siwon. T-T
then I'd scream at Sungmin saying "Stop being a fcking martyr! You don't deserve it!" while breaking down and crying... ;A;

now I know why you're proud of it. it's beautiful. :)
and you made me tear up..
♥♥♥

but don't kill me bb. I'm kind of confused because Heechul mentions Sungmin is his cousin but in the end Sungmin says Heechul's his older brother

maxism12 February 20 2011, 09:39:39 UTC

Nothing beats HanChul smut; even Gods approve of their kinkiness. /sobs Idk. I imagine Sungmin to be like that you know, someone who wouldn't give up that easily T.T

Thank you love ♥ I'm proud of my barely there smut for the first time♥

It's like the older brother Sungmin never had, he holds Heechul that close to him, even though Heechul is just a cousin. T.T that makes Sungmin more saint like, doesn't it???? /bawls

Need to write SiMin fluff to get over this heartbreak.

still_doll_15 February 22 2011, 04:37:38 UTC

I AGREE! sex god Changmin approves of their kinkiness. and even sex god Jaejoong.. xDD
I guess I kinda view Sungmin as a little bit fragile but him as a person who won't give up that easily is a change :)

THERE IS SMUT THERE! I SEE IT!!!

oh, I see... Sungmin is a martyr saint.. ;A;
I will be waiting for that!

HWAITING! :)

♥♥♥

Fuck Me >.< its_klutzilla March 1 2011, 19:43:43 UTC

I AM SO SORRY. It slipped my mind when i got to class that i had to go back and comment. And I was so tired I didn't even remember when I got home. And then....it came back up now, FUCK I AM SO SORRY >.Yes, I see the smut. Small. But significant enough to get the point across. Theres not enough detail to call it SMUT. But there isnt the lack of it to called implied smut either. It's good. But There should have been more PHYSICAL details. Unless you were going for just the Emotional end of it. If that was it, then it was BRILLIANT. I remember my eyes went super WIDE when I saw the first like, and my head went "Hello, isn't this interesting *wink wink*" (butI don't like sichul ( ... )

Re: Fuck Me >.< maxism12 March 2 2011, 03:00:49 UTC

/sighs I was actually kind of proud of my smut (barely there smut) but now I see it in a new light or something. =)

The whole feel of the smut and that line wasn't actually to make it sensual or carnal it was more like a feeble attempt to bring out Siwon's character's feelings - He hates it, but he can't resist it. So I guess it falls on the emotional end of the smut. it wasn't supposed to make anyone go RAWR because well, the whole point is Siwon is a basterd for doing it, so it was supposed to make people feel more on the 'Fuck You We Hate You Siwon' feel. This piece isn't really revovling around smut, so I haven't explained(?) it properly. There is no sensual/carnal feeling that is supposed to be felt because well the whole plot focuses on how Siwon hates himself and Sungmin is waiting, Heechul is probably just like catalyst that's added for the reaction to take place. =S

Sending you a message now about something.

Re: Fuck Me >.< its_klutzilla March 2 2011, 04:23:58 UTC

Oh good god. Now I feel like a bigger jackass. *God I love you so much, your all innocent /sobs*

If thats how you wanted it to go, then you go it right. Perfectly right. (but no....it still....kinda....not much made me hate siwon. I hated siwon because KJGLKDGFHLKFJHGLFJHGL.FDHG.KBG IT'S SUNGMIN HOW COULD YOU YOU BASTARD. Oh look, there you go, you got your desired effect.)

NO HONESTLY. CHOI FUCKING SHIWON, JUST WHO DO YOU THINK YOU ARE? JUST CAUSE THE WORLD THINKS YOUR THE MOST HANDSOME MAN EVER, MAKES YOU THINK YOU CAN BE ALL THAT *does three point finger snap* SUNGMIN CAN DO BETTER THAN YOU. HE CAN DO HYUKJAE/HANKYUNG ALL AT ONCE, AND THEN YOU CAN CRY ABOUT WHAT YOU LUCKED OUT ON.

Right sorry. Had to let that out. SiMin Fo-Eh-Buh. :DDD

I'm sorry again. Your smut was brilliant. I still feel horrid *headdesk*

Re: Fuck Me >.< its_klutzilla March 2 2011, 04:26:25 UTC

And message? What message? Are you telling me I get to see an EMAIL from YOU after yoochun-knows-how-long?!?!? Or is that my sleep making me delusional??
It's like 8:30am back home right? Good Morning ^^