As Luck Would Have It

[masu_trout]

Title: As Luck Would Have It
Author: Masu Trout
Rating: E 10+ (PG)
Verse: Gen V
Characters: White, N
Summary: One year later, she finds him in a casino. (Because N is a hard person to let go of.) Written for pokeprompts.

Comments

[simon_alexander]

I really liked this story! ^_^ Ferriswheelshipping (even in just friendship) is one of my favorite 5th gen shippings, and this was a really nice fic! I especially liked how you created the Veilstone casino, making it more realistic. ^_^ Great job!

[masu_trout]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. I love ferriswheelshipping too, but I'm really bad at writing romance. So this was a compromise of sorts. ^-^

[clear_bell]

This fic had so many good points, I'm not sure where to start. I guess what deserves mention first and foremost is your incredible characterizations =D

N was both completely in-character in my opinion, and absolutely adorable. I loved the way you described him, sitting "board-straight and uncomfortable, looking like he’d rather be anywhere else," it really fit, and I could see him perfectly. I also wanted to give him a hug >///< The moment when he admitted he hadn't really thought about, and White calling him the stupidest genius she knows...I want to go back and reread it every time I think about it! I also loved when he said he was looking for paradise--so touching--and when he said he hadn't realized she'd care

[masu_trout]

♥!

Thank you for such a nice comment!

It's good to know that you liked my N, because he was the character I was most worried about portraying. He's a hard guy for me to fully understand, but I like him a lot.

Ad yes, you're absolutely right. That isn't supposed to say X there. *blushes* Thanks for pointing that out, and thank you for such a lovely comment. It really made my day!

[toryloser]

Me gusta. :D Nice writing!

[masu_trout]

Thank you very much! :D

[ainbthech]

I greatly enjoyed this! I liked how White got into the search, how Zoroark showed up and did Zoroarky things... were the three goons supposed to be the Shadow Trio? Because I thought they were and that was cool. :) And how N, at the end, is all "I'd like that" --- it's very much how I imagine N.

I was surprised by the hair-brushing a little bit, as it felt like more of a liberty for her to take with his body than seemed appropriate. But they'd just spent a much of time riding together, so maybe it worked for them? Her hitting him, too, although it's hard to blame her too much.

The bird looked up from the bones of the magikarp he’d caught and took to the air.

Pokemon ecology isn't always pretty! Thanks again for sharing this story.

[masu_trout]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :)

White... yeah, I've always imagined her as a rather bold, forward person. She would have stopped if he asked her to, though. (To be honest, for all her bluster, I think she could be nearly as awkward as N is some situations.)

Thanks for the lovely review!

[sofiamerri]

This adorable :) I could totally see N playing in a casino, not knowing he woul dgte in trouble. And White being there to save him was uber cute. I also liked how she was angry at him and didn't just run straight back into his arms, even didn't know what to say to him at first. That's more realistic than most people write the reunion of the two. This was overall just really, really, cute.
Keep writing!
Sofia

[masu_trout]

Aww, thanks!

Hehe, N doesn't seem like he'd be the sort to really *get* why people are so obsessed with money, does he?

And I'm really happy you thought it was cute. ♥