D-Day Anniversary. Part 1

[mase992]

(A/N): If you find any mistakes in the French, Russian, or Polish bits I do apologize and please don't hesitate to correct me!

Title: “Europe in the Morning”  
Characters: America/Alfred, England/Arthur, Russia/Ivan, France/Francis, Poland/Feliks, Lithuania/Toris, Germany (if you squint), Japan/Kiku.

Pairings: America/England, implied America/England

Comments

[mase992]

Aw thank you so much! ^^ Well, it's true. It's France's territory so all's fair. XD

[sutekikage]

That was beautifully written, can't wait for more! =D

[mase992]

Thank you, really! Well, there is a part 2 ;D.

[bavarois]

oh man, your writing style is amazing. very lyrical and real. can't wait to read more!

[mase992]

'///' Thank you so much, darling! (cute icon is cute!) I wanted to keep this as crude and accurate as possible so the comment is a big thumbs up for moi :D!

If you're still interested here's the second part: http://mase992.livejournal.com/5865.html

[slasherfersure]

Lovely! :D

[mase992]

Thank you! Hope you enjoy part 2 then! :)

[snappy8000]

Beautiful, but I've already told you how much I liked this story of yours. C: Loved the fact that you added so much (I could see so much of your personal experience in Paris, and that was really nice because it sounds so... sincere, somehow, when Alfred walks by the Seine). Speaking of which, the descriptions of the river were marvellous.
Sexy scene turned out quite alright with the added descriptions too (and that would have killed the entire class had you actually read that).
I assume your dad helped you with the French? (: Mine isn't quite so good yet so I'm afraid I can't correct anything (not that I found anything wrong, but eh...)
Right then, off to part deux!

[mase992]

Woah! Slow reply! Sorry 'bout that... Nyah baby, your comments always make me happy!

And yeah... you know I had to stick the Paris trip in the somewhere. And I still feel like I could add so much more but maybe... that would be too much? I don't know, I don't feel like I've completely portrayed the beauty of Paris or how much it means to me or to the world. To show why it has been agreed that that city will never be bombed. But I don't know... I'm not completely satisfied yet with that part XD;. I mean, I like it better but... I don't know. You tell me? I'm ridiculous, hahaha;;. But thank you for at least, liking that bit and that I pro'lly managed to express to an extent my love for that bloody fantastic city...

Sexy scene was... lame, admit it, damn it! XD;;

Yup. Daddy was all the French. ;) (heck, baby. Your French is better than mine so there, all the right to brag! Hahaha!)

I just can't be happy with anything I write, can I? Gah... I'm so lame.... haha;;

[snappy8000]

Used to it already ;) (j/k...) Thank you bb, I'm glad they do that xD

Of course you had to. And there's never too much of Paris, but perchance for this story it was more than enough (you are concentrating on the War, but I could see that you'd be going for establishing the idea of the city being indestructable, even by such atrocities). But I think you made your point. If you'd like to add some more, try it and see if it fits, else just leave it like it is. (But remember too much paint can break the canvas... paper... thing)

Oh, come on, sexy scene was good. Subtle for the usxuk fans, but it's good. Portrays a scene of chaos and confusion and perhaps alcohol-induced stupor :D

I could guess as much :) (Well, yes, but hopefully you'll get French classes soon too and then we can totally send notes in French during class *lol I'm such a dork* )

Common thing to happen to writers; we never seem to find our work good enough and will always try finding faults. We are our worst critics haha